Reviews For Meeting Marie
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Reviewer: Jimbob Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 05 2014 5:40 PM Title: Secrets not so Secret

Well this guy's life certainly sucks. Hopefully it gets better, but something tells me that's not going to be the case.

Reviewer: Ghostkiller Signed [Report This]
Date: May 23 2014 2:59 PM Title: Secrets not so Secret

Can't wait for chapter three!!!

Reviewer: ChristianPlaysMCraft Signed [Report This]
Date: April 15 2014 4:02 AM Title: Secrets not so Secret

It's great cant wait for the next one

Reviewer: midnightwriter85 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 10 2014 7:03 PM Title: Secrets not so Secret

Sounds like the perfect set-up, Dude!  Is this going to be a shorter story, or a long one? 

Seems like alot happened within the first chapter, and you've only briefly introduced the characters...

I mean, I'm not one to say that I don't like getting right into it, but... a lot DID happen!   Maybe, just a bit more 'development', or 'build-up' would have added more to the suspense.  

 The hottest girl in school discovering your fantasy's and even though, she's never really talked to you, she decides to invite you over to her house.... and make your wildest dreams a reality...

Don't get me wrong, I love it!  That's just the only thing, that I could see, that you could of done differently

Keep going.  I can't wait for Marie to become the Towering Beauty!

 

Reviewer: Tiny T Signed [Report This]
Date: April 09 2014 5:25 PM Title: Secrets not so Secret

no critism from me, i like this

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