Reviews For Im-stomp-tu
You must login (register) to review.
Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: March 03 2014 4:42 PM Title: Im-stomp-tu

It's a interesting read. It's a shame it's so short though. As for the ending, no deity, at least in monotheism, is merciful in my opinon. The deity watches as people squirm in hell knowing they did nothing to stop them from ending up there. Those in heaven know of the plight of those in hell. Even on this Earth I worry for those less fortunate than I am. Hélder Câmara once said: "When I give food to the poor, they call me a saint. When I ask why they are poor, they call me a Communist." 

Apprently those in heaven aren't supposed to worry about those in hell. Why is it a crime to ask why good people suffer? How can a loving god send so many people to hell? They are victims of the circumstance, born into the wrong religion or affected by choice and chance. I do good things because I want to and I don't expect a reward and yt nastier people than me may end up in heaven simply because of a choice they made? That doesn't seem fair to me.

I'm sorry for getting sidetracked. Including religous themes in my stories has got people moaning at me in the past but in my opnion, if somebody is religious enough to care then it feels like a contradiction that they should be on what could be classed as a porn website. 

I did notice a couple of mistakes:

Here:

I decided to continued my cat and mouse game. 

You mean: continue

Here:

"See I love crushing little men but I hate the mess you make when you pop and

I think it could do with a comma after "see" but I'm not sure. I suppose it could work find without but it helps break up the sentence better.

Hopefully you'll contribute more in the future. The more you read and write the better you'll become.

Reviewer: Dudemanguy Signed [Report This]
Date: February 23 2014 5:57 PM Title: Im-stomp-tu

Tell him I said hi too!

Make sure to include me!

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 17 2014 11:47 PM Title: Im-stomp-tu

Short, but sweet. I can tell this story came from the heart. Thats what makes it special.

Good work Anez.

 

P.S

tell Deelann I said Hi

Reviewer: Dudemanguy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 17 2014 6:47 PM Title: Im-stomp-tu

As many say it's quality not quantity. It may be short, but I like it! Good job Anez!

 

Reviewer: Maximus Signed [Report This]
Date: February 11 2014 9:37 PM Title: Im-stomp-tu

Good first attempt. My tiny advice (tiny, get it get it) is more "foreplay" more of that kicking him across the room, bat him around a little more, would have given the story just enoiugh length to be acceptable for a short story and given the reader a fun scene :)

 

Good job though!

 



Author's Response:

First, thanks for the review. I agree definitely on the "foreplay". The next story I'm collaborating with Deelann on has a nice amount of it. I look forward to posting more stories and look forward to your input.

 

oxox

Mistress Anez

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 11 2014 4:11 PM Title: Im-stomp-tu

A wonderful short story ma'am

Author's Response:

Thanks for the support!

Little men are great for that. (The support beneath my foot, that is)

 

oxox

Mistress Anez

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: February 11 2014 1:06 PM Title: Im-stomp-tu

It was really short so it didnt cost me any time at all to read it. But I still think it should of been longer, more descriptive, etc. Its a start though, just keep writting and Im sure your stuff will get better and better.



Author's Response:

I'm definitely working on being more descriptive. I was kind of shy since this was my first story. I'm doing my best to get better.

 

Thank you for your review.

oxox

Mistress Anez

Reviewer: wildcatman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 11 2014 12:10 PM Title: Im-stomp-tu

Well, you weren't lying when you said it was short.  If your really interested in getting better, then I can tell you what I think...   but, remember, it's just my opinoin so don't get mad at me and try to hunt me down and squash me!

First off: Let the reader have enough time to get inside the head of the shrinkee.            

At least one page of discription, telling either what has been happening to him for the last few days and what he feels about it...  you know, just kind of introduce him, and let his personality come out.

Second: Give some examples of what your capable of...as a giantess.

Either from his POV, or from yours, doesn't matter, although- yours would be alot better if you told it in a dream-like state, where you go crazy with every little detail in discribing what you can do...

Lastly, don't be so quick to stomp.  Carry it out, for at least two or three paragraphs and actually toy with the idea of 'letting-him-go', maybe?  Then, always slowly squash!

If your nice, you might just squish him, just a lil' bit...  and, you don't always, have to crush himin to paste, you could just slightly break him, and let him still live for a little while..

But, that's just my 2-cent's...

I'm just fasinated to see a female writing GTS storys!   ;`)



Author's Response:

Hi WCM,

Thank you for your review and insight, Deelann and I are actually working on another one now thats a little longer than this one and hopefully it will be up soon.

 

Oh, btw I don't need a reason to squash you. Come over a little closer and we'll "talk" about it. (wiggling toes) ;-)

 

oxox

Mistress Anez

You must login (register) to review.