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Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 21 2014 5:19 AM Title: Out in the Stary Sky

Wow, Arell seems so tortured, she really needed that moment with Bradley. I have to agree, she is so real at this point in the story, so broken and vulnerable, let me hug her nose bridge too!

  I think she and the protaganist in my story have similar problems. However Jessica from Aftermath was more accidental while Arell's were deliberate and calculated and Arell caused far more damage than Jessica although both are trying to redeem themselves. 

  I like where you're going with this and I hope you don't end it too abruptly, let the story or as a popular song lyric goes: "Let it go! Let it go!"

Reviewer: pkong Signed [Report This]
Date: February 17 2014 6:22 PM Title: Out in the Stary Sky

Well, I finally found this story again to leave a review. I have nothing to add about Col. Stark that hasn't already been said, he's a jerk, but raises good points and the aliens should leave us alone.

However, what I'm most interested in this story is the so called GeekZilla. Dr. Monica has lost everything, she has to reconcile with killing thousands if not millions of people, shes hated and feared by her own people and is now stuck as a giant. I want to hear more about her story.

How will she deal with this? Who will she interact with her now tiny countrymen? With the Arkavians? Could she be a boon to the mission since shes kind of stuck between both worlds?

Frankly her situation is far more interesting than that of the other characters. Its a shame she seems to be relegated to a side character.

P.S Everyone did forgive Arell way to fast. Starks outburst was actually more understandable than the rest of the conversation.



Author's Response:

I wouldn't say they've necessarily forgiven her. Todd was basically worrying about it, and the others are quick to hide behind Bradley when Arell gets annoyed. Kevin has forgiven her, only because he thinks she's attractive, and the others are mostly neutrally cautious towards her. But when you're riding along with someone much larger with you, you'll go along with any casual conversation, if it helps loosen the tension, ya know?

See my response to the preceding review for my own thoughts on Colonel Stark's points.

Reviewer: Darklombax123 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 14 2014 2:41 PM Title: Out in the Stary Sky

Dude seriously why every time that I read this story I get a misanthropic feeling

I do not understand how Avakonians get to judge humanity just because they are similar to them makes no sense both grew up on different planets and with different social norms if they are as understanding and peaceful as you depict in this story there shouldn't be any conflict which makes them hypocrites because humanity can have the potential to good or bad which doesn't give them the right to downplay how we evolved and also I think the Avakonians are just controlling because any species that doesn't act or behave the way they want then they will get rid of them which them no different than the daleks from doctor who except with robots and your main character is bland and character most the story it's seems like he is just there not really interacting with the story same with the supporting characters expect stark

Author's Response:

Hehe, you're sounding like Colonel Stark.

Stark is basically arguing in favor of moral relativism, according to which the Avakonians are wrong in judging the "Earthies" and they ought to just deal with the way they live even if they strongly disagree with it. But the Avakonians feel they must do something because they feel a kinship to the Earthies, because they are human as well. I don't know anything about you, but for the sake of discussion, I'm going to assume you're an American. Here, we have our own culture and norms. People in North Korea grew up on a completely different country with different social norms and cultural practices. And, there is strong evidence that the people living there are subjected to torture and otherwise treated poorly by their own Government and its supporters. Yet, I assume you accept those people are also human, even though they're from a different country with different social norms, right? If you do, then the question becomes this: Do you do nothing and just say "Well, I guess it's their own country, and their business, so we'll just leave them alone and tolerate it" or would you say "That's not right, what they're doing is wrong, and something must be done". That's what the Avakonians are doing. The constant human violence on Earth is not something the Avakonians will tolerate, and so they are trying to do something. The irony is that, in the famous words of Nietzsche, in attempting to fight monsters, they are in grave danger of becoming monsters themselves. It supposed to show that even a highly civillized society like Avakon still holds deeply rooted flaws that occasionally threaten to be dragged out into the light of day. You MUST (I cannot stress this enough) remember that the Avakonians are not perfect. They are people, and, just like us "Earthies", their emotions get the better of them.

Naturally, I disagree with Bradley being bland (except maybe in the case of The New Frontier, since he was more of a secondary character there). He, Arell, and Colonel Stark are the three main characters right now, with the rest of them, indeed, being more support. Right now, there is a grave tension between Arell and Stark and a sort of awkward reunion between her and Bradley, whom she imprisoned in the first story. If Bradley was bland, I expect there wouldn't be reviewers wondering what path his relationship with Arell is going to take. But, to each his own, I suppose.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 07 2014 5:23 PM Title: Out in the Stary Sky

Really happy to see an update to this series so quickly. I'm hoping to see more interaction between Bradley and Arell, I get the feeling they could be good friends now that Arell isn't all "world domination".

Reviewer: Kusanagi Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 07 2014 4:46 PM Title: Out in the Stary Sky

Not to cheer on someone's misfortune, but I'm happy that the news she was on earth devestated Geekzilla. If she had been able to get over not only the deaths of thousanda, but likely all her friends and colleagues she would have been a rather hollow character.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: February 07 2014 6:16 AM Title: Out in the Stary Sky

  I wonder if there will be romance between Arell and Bradley? This third entry in your series is interesting and I hope it is as engaging as some of the best work on this site. 

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