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Reviewer: pkong Signed [Report This]
Date: July 01 2014 7:36 PM Title: Sisters - Part 4

Nice to see you back from bullying Jacksmith into including your characters in his story :)

Anyway, Stephanie has always been the most interesting of the three girls due to her colorful backstory. In a way she is the most innocent as she really does have a problem.

But doesn't it seem like Claire is pushing too hard? i'm no psycologist but if mental problems could be confronted this easily I imagine the discipline wouldn't exist. I feel like Claires little questions shouldn't be able to get through Stephanies shield of denial so easily, and even if it did would'nt it leave the girl more of a mess than she already is? After all her denial of the love she holds for her brother is the only thing keeping her from drowning in guilt.

On the other hand I can see you not wanting to drag this out too long. I just caution you to avoid making her look like she's simply being stubborn instead of someone with a serious self delusion.

Your writings as strong as always, I look forward to the next update



Author's Response:

I think it's important to keep in mind that in their first session, Claire basically walloped the emotional dam Stephanie keeps up wih a wrecking ball. It's been a month since then, and Claire has been picking away at what's left  to get through ever since, challenging Stephanie on it just about every day. This is ultimately that coming to a head of sorts.

Thank you for the review, though, and I'm hoping I can deliver on what's to come.

Reviewer: Kusanagi Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 01 2014 4:27 PM Title: Sisters - Part 4

I think this whole sisters arc has been amazing so far. As I’ve said before Stephanie’s my favorite of the prisoners and her internal struggle is both painful and captivating. This new insight from Claire is intriguing since I’ve often felt it’s only an unfortunate twist that separated Claire and Stephanie, but that might not be the case. 

 



Author's Response:

Thank you, I'm really glad you've enjoyed this whole thing, especially since Steph is my favorite as well. We'll have a look at Claire's thoughts on this next chapter.

Reviewer: chrlorez Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 01 2014 1:14 AM Title: Sisters - Part 4

Oddly, a hard chapter to read for me. It kind of hurts my gut to see Stephanie not only so blinded by fear of being hurt, that she can't even notice that she's still emotionally hurting herself anyway. Hopefully, a nice quiet trip to the library will get her to loosen up a little. Unless Claire is a fan of F. Scott Fitzgerald books. Then I'll pass.

This brings up another universe question. Are there any books or movies that exist within both the Omega universe and real life?



Author's Response:

Hm, well, we'll see what she means by "library."

And yes, there are. In fact, back in Realize Part 2, the movie they watch is the newer True Grit.

Thanks for reviewing.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 30 2014 11:55 PM Title: Sisters - Part 4

You are insanely good at writing chapters that almost make me possibly consider almost tearing up a little.

Great stuff.



Author's Response:

Only possibly getting you to consider almost tearing up a little, huh?

Apparently I need to try harder!

Thank you, though, for the comments.

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: June 30 2014 10:00 PM Title: Sisters - Part 4

Good chapter. Your descriptions are always excellent. Despite there not actually being tiny people in the glass, Claire's narration made the scenario and the sense of power and responsibility come alive. I wonder if Stephanie will actually break down or just crack altogether.



Author's Response:

Thank you for the comments, especially re: the narration in regards to the glass of water. That was something I was a bit worried about from an execution standpoint because it really is just Claire talking while she plays with some water, but I'm glad it worked out.

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 30 2014 9:52 PM Title: Sisters - Part 4

Man you just keep getting better and better. I'm pretty much waiting with baited breath at what happens next, the tension is that palable. This chapter is just under Place - Part 2 as far as my favorites are concerned. 



Author's Response:

Hahah, oh geez, thank you for that. I really hope I can deliver on this next bit.

Thank you for the comments, as usual.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 30 2014 9:14 PM Title: Sisters - Part 4

Claire really going all out to save Stephanie from the dark abyss but her words ring so true. Stephanie will regret all of this when she can't remember her little brother at all. 

 Stephanie so far has been the most interesting, everytime she lashes out at Claire she only hurts herself, leaving more and more scars.



Author's Response:

Very true.

And yes, Stephanie is certainly the most interesting to me. I'm enjoying handling her. Thanks for the comments :)

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 30 2014 8:40 PM Title: Sisters - Part 4

Loved the chapter! I'm eagerly awaiting the next one; hopefully a breakthrough is on the horizon!



Author's Response:

Guess we'll see :3

Thanks for reviewing.

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