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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 03 2015 1:48 PM Title: Place - Part 2

Whew! You--and Melody--had me worried there, for a second.

Reviewer: 360fighter Signed [Report This]
Date: February 13 2014 12:46 AM Title: Place - Part 2

Wow this is incredible. Really well done

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: February 12 2014 10:28 PM Title: Place - Part 2

That chapter very much WAS enjoyable! I loved the double cross and the irony of Marion's own words being used against her to determine her punishment. And the vore scene was very sexy/horrifying just as it should be. I have to wonder if Marion will be changed by this experience and see the correlation between how she treats Betas and how she's been treated by the Omegas. Given what a self-centered, spoiled bitch she seems to be though, that seems unlikely.

Very curious to learn more about Dr. Everett and what rules or sanctions are in place to keep the Omegas from being corrupted. Power does tend to go to some people's heads after all.

Reviewer: Kusanagi Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 11 2014 4:15 PM Title: Place - Part 2

Marion truly is a detestable thing. I’m usually into the more gentle side of the genre, but have to admit a sense of cathartic pleasure seeing her suffer. I’m interested to see what, if anything, can really be done for her. Once you get it into your head that everything you do is blessed by God, and anything against you is against his will short of religious epiphany is there any way to change?

 On the debate I don’t think it’s a thin line between Marion and the Omegas at least not with the information that’s been presented.  Marion maims, kills, and manipulates, because ‘she can’ and it makes her feel good, we haven’t seen anything from the Omegas on that level of pointless violence. Of course Marion is an extremely poor example because she’s terrible to Alphas as well. Even if Betas didn’t exist she would be a waste of oxygen. Probably the better comparison would be Omegas to Alphas before the Omegas arrived.

While there’s certainly the danger that Omegas could abuse their power, and really that’s a danger in any setting with dramatic size differences, so far there’s been no evidence that Omegas interfere in any way that doesn’t concern the abuse of Betas. There is also at least some accountability here as evidence needs to presented, and approval of punishment has to be granted before anything is carried out. There’s nothing to suggest they’re plucking up Alphas on suspicion and just dealing punishments on a whim. Given that Marion got away with murder twice before finally being caught I would say the Omegas are for the most part hands off without proper leads or evidence.

I don’t think they especially get off on torturing Alphas either. We know there are mixed couplings, and Claire has pointed out they (or at least she) would prefer rehabilitation to resorting to fear or death. There are even built in ways to reduce sentences.

 



Author's Response:

Don't want to say too much on Marion, but I appreciate hearing your thoughts on her. As I've remarked to you before, I'm also usually into the more gentle side of the genre, but I enjoy the prospects for catharsis that this concept brings by virtue of "the victim" being a legitimately bad, toxic person. I've found I mind the cruelty and humiliation a lot less when it happens to a character like Marion.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 11 2014 3:31 AM Title: Place - Part 2

You've crafted an amazing story with engaging characters and very eloquently crafted plot turns.

I look forward to reading more wherever it goes.

Author's Response:

Thank you. I'm hoping I can keep it up.

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 11 2014 12:16 AM Title: Place - Part 2

@Nostory and Pkong

I believe that Omega’s already crossed the line when they had to use force originally to make the Alpha’s accept the Beta’s as people. If we go with what Claire said to Naomi in chapter 5 about Omega’s eating Alpha’s in the early days. It makes it seem like beta mistreatment was so widespread before the Omega’s showed up that force was the only option back then. So far the story hasn’t told us how long Aegis has been around or if beta’s had a civilization before the Omega’s showed up.

There is too little information to go on to make anything but speculation regarding the Omega’s influence around the world. All we know is that they’re incredibly advanced, they have their own set of laws, and that they might originally be Beta’s or Alpha’s that were transformed by some process. We also know that Alpha’s can aid Aegis when the need arises. And finally that Omega’s are a huge source of humanitarian aid for betas.

Omega’s haven’t been shown doing anything evil or mistreating Alpha’s for fun unlike Marion who can kill two people and get away with it Scott free. 

So the difference between Omega's and Marion is that one is trying to help a lesser race despite said race being the size of mites to them even if their methods are shady and unclear and the other have no problem maniplating Alpha's and Beta's to her own ends 

 

Reviewer: Flaming_Heart Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 11 2014 12:03 AM Title: Place - Part 2

Great emotion. I officially hate Marion, which you achieved in your writing. And Melody is tricky. I couldn't believe it at first till I remember her huge crush on Corey.

Really looking forward for next chapter.

Author's Response:

Thank you, I appreciate the remarks :)

Reviewer: pkong Signed [Report This]
Date: February 10 2014 11:17 PM Title: Place - Part 2

You know, while I don't like Marion for obvious reasons, I'm finding myself not liking the Omega's much either. I mean it sounds like they have no authority to do what they do other than size. They are an organization that does what they want when they want all because they are bigger and all they do is terrorize Alphas

Granted they do it on behalf of betas, but it seems like their police like nature is really just a sham for tyrants who make their own laws and ignore ones they don't like.

In that way, how are Omega's different than Marion? They may not say it but they do believe in place as much as Marion does. They believe it is their place and god given right to punish alphas whenever they feel like it however they feel like it. They are total hypocrites.



Author's Response:

As Kazuma and Kusanagi commented on, we haven't seen any violent action from and Omega toward an Alpha that has not committed a crime against a Beta. 

 

Yes, they do wield a lot of power, and are immune from standard law, but Melody and Claire both make it known that they are held accountable for the things they do.

 

As far as "whenever they feel like it and however they feel like it" goes, Kusanagi noted that there are mechanisms in place that can dramatically reduce those punishments if taken advantage of. You should also note Melody's remark about Marion's session particulars being in compliance with the disciplinary plan for an A-Class offense: In this case, an assault that was seconds away from being murder. Not all crimes against Betas result in the same acceptable level of punishment.

 

I do appreciate hearing your thoughts, though, and I thank you for them.

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 10 2014 11:00 PM Title: Place - Part 2

Dat twist

Dat reveal

Dat sense of absolute dread and foreboding when Marion knew she was fucked.

Dat getting eaten alive

Dat "No" 

…This chapter… THIS chapter!  

I have nothing else to say. This was even better than the vet scene in the original Titan in how it made me feel. 

Awesome work. 

 



Author's Response:

That's all that needs to be said for me to be happy with this review.

The vet scene is one of my favorite scenes in a story, so it is a comparison I am extremely pleased with. I'm glad you liked it.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 10 2014 10:25 PM Title: Place - Part 2

Yikes , eaten alive! So Omegas run the country or are they a separate society of their own? With their own rules? Good twist,it was not exactly hinted at but Melody hadn't said she would help at all. Marion probably deserves it and I think a few chapters with Corey and the three girls would be nice, a light break from the darkness and sombre tone of thr previous few chapters.

What a story! Good time to be on this site with your story, the Titan series, Splinter's Edge all being actively updated, I feel as though we are in a golden age of GTS stories! I'd add my own but I place no value in self-praise and besides, I think the best is yet to come!



Author's Response:

There will definitely be some cooldown time coming up for several chapters.

 

Thank you for the high praise, as the Titan series is one of my favorites on here.

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