WOW!!!!!

So, this is the trend-setting tale from which Nostory got the inspiration to do his Omegaworld pastiches. Absolutely riveting! And, I mean that in the sense that I've read these first eight chapters straight through!! Something unusual where my reviews are concerned.

That being said; let me prolong my long-windedness by praising you on the plausibility of all your characters' emotional displays. Jenna and Marion, especially! They both seem to feel that greater height makes right. The only real difference between them (aside from size and mass) being the way they implement their attitudes.

Marion = indiscriminate persecution and torture.

Jenna = smothering over-protectiveness.

Well I love it. I like the reaction Melody and Jenna, the different personalities but both want vengeance for Vincent.

I can't wait for the next chapter. And this story is one of my favorites.

First of, I knew this would happen.  Lucky Naomi got saved before it went too far.  

The first description of events didn't make any sense til it was explained later.  I still had to go back and reread the beginning.  (Little extra work for your reader there.)

Jenna isn't entirely wrong, but maybe not the right reasons for her outlook.  (Like to hear more about Vincent, I assume he's the boy with one arm.)  Interesting that they transfered from her care.  That's almost as big a conflict of interest as Claire.  I'm now starting to think transferring them may not have been done with malicious intent.

That had to have sucked for Claire though, having a beta brother and being last in her class certified to even interact with him.

 This might be better for Naomi.  She'll think hard on what she was told.  But she maybe needs less to share a Beta's pain as to learn to be compassionate to those smaller than her instead of using them as an outlet for her frustrations.  That's more like what an Omega like Jenna is doing.

So Naomi knows about Stephanie's history.  Awfully quick to toss Marion under the bus.  Let's see how things go with her.