Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed [Report This]
Date: February 22 2014 1:16 PM Title: Power

I've avoided reading this story because of the tags. I cannot stand violent gts. However I'm glad I've read this far. You're an incredibly skilled writer. This chapter is amazing. I love Claire's outlook, she's a very deep thinker. Amazing chapter. Did I already say that?

Author's Response:

Hahah, thank you, both for giving my little project here a chance and for the praise :)

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: January 17 2014 2:10 AM Title: Power

Great chapter! The mouthplay/torture scene was fantastically sexy but I like that you also balanced it with character development and a slightly more friendly moment between Claire and Naomi. I continue to enjoy Claire's character and the whole philosophy behind the Omegas.

Was the story about former punishments true or just meant to scare her? If the former, it seems like there's been some serious revision to the Omega program.

Reviewer: Kusanagi Signed [Report This]
Date: January 16 2014 5:03 PM Title: Power

I felt this was going to be a make or break chapter for me as I’m not the biggest fan of the humiliation/torture genre, but while the punishment was the predominant focus there was a substantial amount of character development with both Carrie and Naomi.

Naomi’s explanation not only explained her focus in the attack, but also put a focus on why such an otherwise sweet girl would be friends with Marion anyway. That Carrie’s focus is to help rehabilitate Naomi and help her realize that she was her own person added so much to that scene.

Carrie’s own development was just as sweet and tied into Naomi’s problem so well. It’s good to see that the Omega’s aren’t perfect, that even though they have the best of intentions they can still be lead astray.

I really have to commend you, I don’t think I’ve ever seen such a good relationship, with such an insane size disparity as Carrie and Corey. Would love to see more insight on their history going forward.

Now comes the hard part, Naomi being the only one who voiced a desire to reform can Carrie keep her composure with the other two. 

 

Author's Response:

I am actually 100% sympathetic  to your first statement. I am really not comfortable with humilitation/torture stuff the majority of the time (and generally prefer a more gentle teasing), but the concept for this showed up in my head and I wanted to run with it.

Expect Claire's story to be a running theme with the Omegas moving forward.

And definitely expect more of them, even if I have to do a few one-offs separate from this one.

As I said to Kazuma, Claire is at least willing to give them a fair shot while leaving them plenty of rope to hang themselves. It's up to them as to how she conducts herself, though the fact that they haven't shown any remorse or given even a token apology is not working well for them.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing :)

 

 

Reviewer: sketch Signed [Report This]
Date: January 16 2014 11:37 AM Title: Power

Another powerful chapter, no pun intended.

It's nice to finally learn the motivation behind Naomi's action.  When the chapter started I thought we were going to find out Naomi was really much darker than previously thought.  Instead I feel all the more sorry for her.

The part about Claire's power over her brother was interesting.  You don't see many writers explore that aspect beyond the stereotypical dominance.  Nice bit of psychology into how they see each out.  (I laughed about the part of finding him the perfect wife.)  It's sad that she would consider losing her "brother" to make him "happy".  I can see why she was trembling to say it.  The part about holding him at eye level is a nice touch.

Speaking of which, it's interesting  that Naomi still has to look up, and that there's a plan for her.  When she gets the eye level treatment, we'll know the two have really connected.  I have to ask though, is there a set of guidelines for these sessions she has to hit?  Because I feel it's going to be hard for her to create a baseline punishment if the two become friends.

 

Author's Response:

Dead honest, there was a lot of dead time that went into the writing of the chapter because in my head I know that Naomi is an extraordinarily sweet girl who had one huge moral lapse after years of belittlement and it was kind of hard to have Claire treat her like that even though I knew exactly what I wanted to do.

 

The more subtle effects of size dispairty have always been an interesting concept to me, and it was enjoyable to write about that. I really don't think you could listen to a scolding from a person a few thousand feet taller than you and not coming out of it feeling worthless, regardless of how good your relationship is. And yes, I got a little kick out of writing about Claire wanting to get a good wife for her brother. It just seemed like such a 13 year old girl thing in my head and I had to include it. Though it becomes a little more chilling to me when I say that it's because she was basically taking the same philosophy she had for her dolls growing up and applying it to her brother.

 

The general guidelines for the sessions in terms of requirements are mostly time and repetition related. Claire can't keep a session going longer than two hours, and she can't make it last below 20 minutes. Naomi pretty much just qualified for the minimum in this chapter. She can also only do a specific session every four weeks. It should be noted that this works heavily in Naomi's favor beyond the first month, provided that she excels at her community service. But she's still going to have to deal with some of the meaner things within Claire's disciplinary plan. Claire also won't neccessarily have complete control over the exact amount of time a session lasts, as we'll see with Stephanie.

 

Thanks for the comments, they're greatly appreciated.