Date: December 24 2013 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 16...All Good Things...
Wow. You know I was really enjoying this story until this last chapter. Totally ruined everything. And not just because you killed all the main characters. Not just because you spent two chapters building the personalities of the kids only to have them die in a single paragraph without achomplishing anything. All of that could be forgivable under the justification that stuff happens in war. However, whats unforgivable is that plot twist that happened at the end. it came right the F*** out of nowhere and rendered your entire story pointless. You might as well delete the entire story and replace it with the words F*** YOU READERS!
Author's Response:
Well i'm sorry you feel that way but the twist in the ending was alluded to in chapter 15. You can see the hints to the nature of the probe by...
1. The president told Nick when the lights appeared by the order of years. If you look at the previous chapters and see that i gave a specific year for their major breakthroughs in tech, then plug in what the president said, then it becomes clearer what the 5 lights meant.
2. The shear size of the damn thing. Come on man...
3. The probe only showing a map on the screen, like it's searching for something...
What i wanted to convey in the entire story altogether was 2 life lessons. First, obsession can destroy you and what you hold dear (think Moby Dick). And second, there's always a bigger fish in the sea.
Sorry you didn't like the ending but i can't please everybody :)