Date: January 05 2016 4:36 AM Title: Feedback Chapter thing
wow, such a brilliant and entertaining story, except for the last couple of chapters. what the fuck.
Author's Response:
What's wrong with the last few chapters? Other than everything going to shit and someone meeting a...nasty end.
Date: January 30 2014 4:16 PM Title: Feedback Chapter thing
1: I think they do a good bit of world building and are quite informative. I feel so long as you have information that can best be conveyed in this format you should continue with them.
2: I could take them or leave them for the most part. They certainly don’t hurt, and I will admit Blue following Isabella’s death was pretty fitting.
3: To be honest, being completely ignorant of Shrink High before this, I don’t think it’s especially necessary. Your own characters have been more than compelling enough to warrant my interest.
4: Completely ignorant so I can’t tell, but I can say I’m enjoying the story a lot so far. Any mood shifts at this point would just be weird.
Date: January 30 2014 3:39 PM Title: Feedback Chapter thing
1) I think that they're good for worldbuilding, and that you should keep them.
2) I think that the music you provided the last time around suited the action well. Keep doing it, as long as the music is appropriate.
3 and 4) I have no experience with Shrink High, and never heard of it until I found this story, so it doesn't matter to me at all.
[Report This]Date: January 30 2014 1:34 PM Title: Feedback Chapter thing
I have no problem with the end pieces, whatsoever. In-story propaganda though they be, on the surface, much lower beneath is their anthropological value as a window into how the giantesses think!
So, keep them coming at the end of each chapter (as long as you wish).
Date: January 30 2014 12:28 PM Title: Feedback Chapter thing
1. Yes it helps with exposition and some of them are amusing to read.
2. To be honest I ignore them. I’d rather set the scene in my head than rely on YT
3. Never played the game so it doesn’t matter to me, but doesn’t the game take place in Japan… Why would they come to America? Either way, I like original stories with only original characters.
4. Once again never played the game, but I enjoy the more realistic feel of the story. That said this universe is still nonsensical to the point where if you place enough scrutiny on how things would actually work with every single living creature shrunk down to 1/100th its normal size the story would break apart. I think you did a good job fleshing out what you could while leaving other stuff to SOD.