Date: January 23 2016 8:00 AM Title: Chapter 1: Things Change
Zanderas skillfully uses words to create a visual image in the reader's mind. The interaction between large and small characters and their environment was complex but easy to follow.
Apparently the animals and the trees shrunk as well as the people! That's good, but it raises questions about the cars and airplanes. I guess I will need to read more to understand this world. Maybe I am overthinking again. I do that.
Glad you are enjoying and thanks for the kind words. This will be answered later on, but everything organic was shrunk, but anything inorganic was left alone. So cars, buildings, etc... are all the same size.
Date: January 05 2016 4:36 AM Title: Feedback Chapter thing
wow, such a brilliant and entertaining story, except for the last couple of chapters. what the fuck.
What's wrong with the last few chapters? Other than everything going to shit and someone meeting a...nasty end.
Date: December 22 2015 6:10 AM Title: Chapter 27: All Have Our Choices to Make
Really hate when the main characters are killed and don't come back, but maybe they do in act 2 and 2.5 but I'm steering away from them atm
Sorry, but Isabella is dead. And just like real life there is no coming back from it.
Date: August 15 2014 6:02 PM Title: Chapter 1: Things Change
I joined the fold, I hope that you will return the favor and join mine Zan.
Anyways, onto the story.
Just want to say that I appreciated the prologue in the beginning of this chapter, it really helped me out since I didn't play the games.
Also in my opinion the explainations you provided did justice to the universe you were trying to build. The hunting trip was an interesting way of introducing the characters and I aplaud the fact that you did this.
Glad it got you up to speed and that the explainations were good. Thanks for the praise.
Date: January 30 2014 4:16 PM Title: Feedback Chapter thing
1: I think they do a good bit of world building and are quite informative. I feel so long as you have information that can best be conveyed in this format you should continue with them.
2: I could take them or leave them for the most part. They certainly don’t hurt, and I will admit Blue following Isabella’s death was pretty fitting.
3: To be honest, being completely ignorant of Shrink High before this, I don’t think it’s especially necessary. Your own characters have been more than compelling enough to warrant my interest.
4: Completely ignorant so I can’t tell, but I can say I’m enjoying the story a lot so far. Any mood shifts at this point would just be weird.
Date: January 30 2014 3:39 PM Title: Feedback Chapter thing
1) I think that they're good for worldbuilding, and that you should keep them.
2) I think that the music you provided the last time around suited the action well. Keep doing it, as long as the music is appropriate.
3 and 4) I have no experience with Shrink High, and never heard of it until I found this story, so it doesn't matter to me at all.
Date: January 30 2014 1:53 PM Title: Chapter 1: Things Change
1. Leave that in, really...
2. Dont care.
3. Yeah, I think you should add these characters...sure some of them are goofy but you can change them somewhat if needed...time has passed after all, people change.
4. I think some ligjtheatedness would help counteract the depressing nature of this story....however dont just shoehorn it in, you need to find good spots where the story can benifit from a bit of humor.
Date: January 30 2014 1:34 PM Title: Feedback Chapter thing
I have no problem with the end pieces, whatsoever. In-story propaganda though they be, on the surface, much lower beneath is their anthropological value as a window into how the giantesses think!
So, keep them coming at the end of each chapter (as long as you wish).
Date: January 30 2014 12:28 PM Title: Feedback Chapter thing
1. Yes it helps with exposition and some of them are amusing to read.
2. To be honest I ignore them. I’d rather set the scene in my head than rely on YT
3. Never played the game so it doesn’t matter to me, but doesn’t the game take place in Japan… Why would they come to America? Either way, I like original stories with only original characters.
4. Once again never played the game, but I enjoy the more realistic feel of the story. That said this universe is still nonsensical to the point where if you place enough scrutiny on how things would actually work with every single living creature shrunk down to 1/100th its normal size the story would break apart. I think you did a good job fleshing out what you could while leaving other stuff to SOD.
Date: January 22 2014 8:33 PM Title: Chapter 1: Things Change
A damn good cliffhanger ending! I'm still saddened about Isabella and confused about Aviel. She might be helping Sanders, then again she might be truly evil now. I've known the true nature of this organization since before the first chapter, but was heartened to see some good people in the Society. Unless it has help from the inside, I don't see the Resistance being able to do much to change things. So I don't have much hope for Sanders' life getting any better anytime soon. But what this means now for the reader is that in this act, that giantesses wasn't necessarily evil. I'm assuming in the 2nd act, every giantess we encounter is going to be evil, from Sanders' pov. I hope the wait isn't too long.
To be fair, Sanders is certainly under no more disillusions about the Society. However, he does know there are good people in it. Isabella wasn't the only good one. Gabby, Alice, Valery, Morgan, and a few others that have not been named ARE good people and Sanders knows it. He isn't going to suddenly think they are all evil, just being lied to and fooled by their higher ups.
As for things getting better, well the second Act is usualy where things go to complete shit so...
Date: January 22 2014 6:09 PM Title: Chapter 27: All Have Our Choices to Make
Aviel you clever clever girl had me fooled half way through, then came the suggestion of the catgirl. She was cruel but needed to be otherwise he would have surely been killed on the spot.
[i]one catgirl escaped[/i] one very intelligent and over eager catgirl no doubt.
It's a shame Isabella died, but it seems we have a new giant on our side and it seems in order to beat the Society being underhanded might just be the way to do it. Can't wait for ACT 2.
That...might be an explaination, yes. I will say, like I mentioned to a few others. Remember that Pyrrha had blonde hair where as the catgirl Sanders was facing was black. And he would have recognized Pyrrha.
The underhanded part though...well lets just say the Resistance isn't exaclty going to paragons themselves.
Date: January 22 2014 6:07 PM Title: Chapter 1: Things Change
Such a gut-wretching chapter, I really don't know how to describe these feelings, but MAN, this is my favorite story at the moment for a damn good reason! I can't wait for act 2!
Glad to hear it and I will try to keep the wait short.
Date: January 22 2014 5:57 PM Title: Chapter 27: All Have Our Choices to Make
Nice an early update!
This chapter was awesome and even more emotional than the last one. Angela is still a bitch and really don’t know how she became a Matriarch. I almost felt sorry for Aviel until the last third of the chapter when she made a complete face-heel turn. Still part of me hopes she is doing all this to make her loyalty to the Society as legitimate as possible and that she knows that the Society is corrupt on some level, but couldn’t do anything about it at her minuscule size. I also don’t know if she expected Pyrra to save Sanders or if she really was just being as cruel as possible. Wishful thinking since as much as I disliked Aviel’s attitude on things I didn’t want her to go all evil.
I feel for Sanders the most, though. He lost two close friends with one being his enemy now. He has very few people he can turn to. Fionne will be fed Society lies and believe he is dead. He’s probably going to join the resistance due to his hatred for the Society. Could he even go back to his family and tell them what happened? Probably would be too risky.
Excellent and emotional chapter all around. Can’t wait to see what else is in stored.
Just have to wait and see if she did. Though, to be fair. Pyrrha had blonde hair where as the catgirl Sanders got was black-haired.
Gabby is still around, sorta, but yes right now, assuming Sanders is even still alive, he has pretty much noone.
And thanks for the kind words.