[Report This]Date: April 30 2014 12:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
This was a really pleasant read. Love what you did with all this. Can't wait to see more from you man.
Author's Response:
Thanks, Asterisk! I appreciate you taking the time to read through it.
[Report This]Date: March 12 2014 11:27 AM Title: Chapter 1
Would it be ridiculous to ask for more feet...? =D
Author's Response:
Haha well, that's a given! I'm glad that you're still following the story Casanova, thank you.
[Report This]Date: June 14 2013 1:53 AM Title: Chapter 1
Tunes, this is a fantastic debut. You're clearly a talented writer, one who has a knack for characters. Parker, Patricia, Victoria, and even the nameless goddess all seem to be quite fleshed out, and I look forward to seeing how they interact in the future. Also, I especially liked the drug/hallucination tack you took with the shrinking. I thought it was very well done, and definitely a unique take on the ubiquitous (at least on this site) shrinking scene.
By that same token, though, I'm just a touch disappointed that the drug/hallucination tack didn't continue to feature heavily in your story. I half-expected Parker to wake up the next morning at his full height and for him to think the whole thing had been a trip, and that later on he would encounter the drug again, and that's when we'd see more shrinking. Don't get me wrong, I'm still very excited to see where you take the story; I guess I was just hoping for you to continue the unique start you had going, as opposed to having him continue his adventure simply and inexplicably shrunk. Put another way, I saw a lot of the magic realism theme in the shrinking scene, and I guess I was hoping for that to continue, especially since it's so rare in this genre.
Ultimately, it's still a great story that I'll keep coming back to. Think of the above paragraph as a musing more than anything. Anyway, thanks for the awesome read, and I hope you'll continue!
Author's Response:
Wow, thanks so much Casanova. That really makes me feel great, and I'm glad that you've enjoyed the story. I was especially worried about character development; it's good to know that I'm at least decently executing it. As for the shrinking means, it makes me even happier that you noticed that and thought it was sweet because I really wanted to branch out from your average shrinking process. Admittedly, I recently hit a writer's block and your comment really has me thinking...That's all I'm going to say ;). Please feel free to continue giving feedback because it helps so much. I appreciate it.
[Report This]Date: June 06 2013 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 1
Take-a-lil'-trip,...take-a-lil'-trip,...Take a lit-tle Trip, wit-Me-eee!
Whiskey, and (Amazon) women, don't mix, Parker. Man, is he gonna have one hell of a hang-over!
Author's Response:
Indeed they don't!
[Report This]Date: June 05 2013 12:23 AM Title: Chapter 1
Great story. I love the pace as well as the realism that this story possesses. Hope to see more. Also the feet where beautifully written.
aaron
Author's Response:
Thank you for the feedback! Realism/relatability are both my more primary goals for this story.
[Report This]Date: June 04 2013 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 1
Great start so far. Looking forward to more!
Author's Response:
Sorry I'm just getting back to you now, but thank you! Hope you're still enjoying the story.
[Report This]Date: June 04 2013 5:37 PM Title: Chapter 1
Tunes, why did you wait so long? This is excellent stuff!
Parker's personality seems to be well-suited for the 'Perfect-Victim', of a beautiful, amazon. Can't wait to see what becomes of him....
I'm on board! Oh, and welcome to the site, Dude.
Author's Response:
Thank you! That means a lot; fiction writing is way out of my comfort zone as a writer.
[Report This]Date: June 04 2013 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
I've got no complaints, so far. Welcome aboard!
Author's Response:
Thank you!