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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 06 2013 4:06 PM Title: Chapter 7

Heh! I thought sure she was going to crush Amy and the other eight, and keep Michael for herself. Nice to see you're not going to go down that overly cliche' path.

Author's Response:

Haha yeah, that's not where I wanted to take this story. Thanks for reading/reviewing!

Reviewer: ArtimusG Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 06 2013 2:33 PM Title: Chapter 7

It's been a while since I last really, really looked forward to a story update here, but you've got me hooked!  For a first attempt at posting a story here, you have by far outdone the standards most people shoot for.  There are so many elements here that I appreciate going in this story, some very obvious, some not so obvious.

For example, I'm a huge unaware and footplay kind of person.  Flip flops are in my top favorites for women to wear while interacting with shrunken people.  Starting the story out with that kind of content already had me interested.  However, a more subtle idea that you've used (and there should be more of this) is having the woman nearly end her friends' lives under foot, and soon after, she becomes as small as them, enduring the same problem with another friend.  It's a very humbling concept and gives a very tangible emotion to the story, and a better sense of perspective.

Speaking of perspective, mentioned in earlier comments was how you haven't made much mention (that I've seen) of their specific size.  Intentional or not, that tends to work for very select stories, yours being one of them.  I prefer much smaller sizes, and this allows me to assume the group is the size I like.

Finally, the introduction of a character who is aware of the situation, and re-introducing the footplay in a whole new way is refreshing, like buying your favorite brand of cereal after trying a different brand for a while.  It's familiar, and yet new, again.  You've done a good job keeping is exciting and anticipating the mood of the story very well here.  I hope to see you not only continue this story, but add others as well! 



Author's Response:

I really appreciate the great review! I'm glad you mentioned enjoying the whole "Amy went from towering over everyone else to standing just as small as them" thing. I really love this idea and I plan to continue playing with it and Amy's thoughts as the story goes on. I actually read through chapter 3 again a few days ago and realized I left something out that I had planned to write in. I put in a little paragraph where she finds a trench in the ground that had been created by her heel before she shrunk and she just stands there, mesmerized by it.

Thank you very much for the review and for reading, I hope you continue to enjoy!

Reviewer: janii8556 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 06 2013 7:06 AM Title: Chapter 1

Nice Going . 

i ll suggest to add up  some idea like tinies resting in truck or maybe like aaron said trying some techniques of escape . and get caught .. and as a punishment claire give some foot play while tinies in truck :D

just a imagination . :D hope other footlovers also like this idea.

 

besides you are good in writing , details .. keep it up .. all the best for further chapters ..Great work !



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Thanks!

Reviewer: codeman83 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 06 2013 6:23 AM Title: Chapter 1

Yeah that was kinda the way I felt too about the truck playing a key role with them getting out of the box. But hopefully they decide to wait till they're no longer in the attic anymore because they would have no way down from there really.

And I'm very curious still about her important work still, maybe she conducts more tests of her own with the shrinking device?  Could there possibly be someone she intends to extract revenge on and add to her collection?  There really are a lot of possibilities with where the story could lead keep up the great work!

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 06 2013 12:59 AM Title: Chapter 7

Big problems pending indeed. I love the fact that you haven't said how small they are because that allows me to think of them being a height I want them to be(2"). I just love how she treats them, because she's not being mean just kinda forcing them to just accept it with intimidation and kindness(maybe cheerfulness is a better word). I of course loved the foot scenes you put in because they didn't seem forced they flowed very well with the context of the story/Claire herself. Also them being put in the attic while she takes care of her errands was great because it's not the typical cliche, of being in her room or closet. Very well done. Just hope that she's right about the bug situation.
And if I could give a thought to what I think might happen next: Jim gets in his truck to turn on the lights and maybe he gets either reckless or desperate and decides to drive his truck thru the cardboard shoebox. But I honestly think it would cause too much damage to the truck to penetrate the cardboard(as far fetched as that sounds), not saying it can't be accomplished actually the opposite. All they would have to do is find some way to weaken the integrity of the wall, maybe with something as simple as peeing on a certain spot(as gross as that sounds, it would be quite effective, maybe lol) or there could be some water left in the truck bed or most likely some coolant/antifreeze.
But then again do they really want to escape from this to just be in the enormous attic?
Great, great story. I hope I didn't come off as too 'preachy' because I really like this story and love the direction it's headed. I just wanted to I guess through some ideas out. And I can't wait to see what happens next.

aaron
PS do any of the tinies have a lighter?

Author's Response:

WARNING: SPOILERS!

 

 

 

Oh man! I already have most of the next chapter written and I'll have it completed and posted here probably Friday night but it's as if you've already read it, haha. I really don't like to reveal my plans for the story but since you guessed so well I'll tell you this now: Much of what you've predicted for the next chapter actually happens or is discussed by the shrunken group.

And please, don't worry at all about being "preachy" or anything like that. The best part of writing this story has been reading comments and reviews from the people reading it. I like to know what people are thinking of each chapter before I post the next one.

Reviewer: codeman83 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 05 2013 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 7

Dude this is amazing the foot play is great, very curious about what her important work is. Keep going!



Author's Response:

Thanks, glad you enjoyed!

Reviewer: codeman83 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04 2013 6:22 AM Title: Chapter 6

Also you never know claire and her mother might not be getting along, she might be waiting for her to come home and shrink her and her vehicle down. Great story keep it up!



Author's Response:

Haha, you and your shrunken vehicles.

I'll tell you the same thing I told Aaron: Claire's mother, Amanda, MAY or MAY NOT appear in some capacity at some point later in the story.

I don't want to reveal anything just yet as a few of my plans aren't 100% set in stone, but I hope you continue to enjoy reading and giving me your thoughts as the story continues to unfold!

Reviewer: codeman83 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04 2013 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 6

I knew this would happen!! She has all the power right in the palm of her hand, very curious to see where you take the story next anything could happen!! Great work!!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04 2013 1:23 AM Title: Chapter 1

UH OH



Author's Response:

Haha. I hope this a good "UH OH." I remember in your last review you mentioned enjoying how this story seemed different from many other stories on this site, I hope you'll be able to continue to enjoy reading even if it starts to show similarities to them.

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 03 2013 11:28 PM Title: Chapter 6

Yet again another phenomenal chapter. I would be lying if I said I wasn't surprised by how Claire did what she wanted at the end. That was spectacular. I wonder if her mom will come back from work early.(that's purely me just wishing out loud lol)
Will there be more interactions with Claire and the tinies? And if so hopefully her big feet too.

aaron

Author's Response:

Thanks, glad you enjoyed!

Claire's mother, Amanda, MAY or MAY NOT appear in some capacity at some point later in the story.

As for you're last question, all I'll say is this: Keep reading. Haha.

Thanks for reading and reviewing, I hope you continue to enjoy!

Reviewer: ZeR0x Signed [Report This]
Date: June 03 2013 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 1

This is actually one of the best stories ive read in the last couple of years. I love how you approach the foot-style and I love how everything feels actually believable as opposed to your typical "GIANTESS SPEAKS IN CAPS LOCK AND IS IMMEDIATELY HORNY" kind of thing.

Excellent job.



Author's Response:

WOW, one of the best you've read in a couple years?! Now that's some high praise! I hope the coming chapters don't disappoint you.

I've read my fair share of stories like what you've mentioned, I know exactly what you're talking about, haha. Thanks for reading, I hope you continue to enjoy!

Reviewer: ephemeral Signed [Report This]
Date: June 02 2013 4:06 AM Title: Chapter 1

I really enjoy this work. It's clear, and at sometimes simplistic in description, but in all the right ways. It really shows up in your minds eye a real picture of what's going on, and in this fetish, that's incredibly important. (At least to me)

So, as a reader, I'm highly anticipating what comes next. I especially like the possible splits you end all the chapters at. A cliffhanger of sorts. For instance, one chapter ended with Claire taking notice of the truck...and you're left wondering what's going to happen next. And now, with her leaving on her mission, and those people being in 2 separate groups...I am left to imagine endless possibilities about what she might end up doing now that the next chapter will focus on her perspective.

I'm glad there's a newer writer with a foot focus, it's fresh and really keeping my interest. I'm coming back day to day to check on progress! Especially after your non-canon teaser chapter, it's clear you know how to work up a good crush scene. I cannot wait.

Looking forward to things to come!



Author's Response:

Thanks for the meaty review, I appreciate it!

I hope my descriptions aren't TOO simple. Please let me know if anything seems rushed and I'll take a look and see if revisions are in order. I think Chapter 3... I think I got so carried away with descriptions back there. I don't know if I will ever be able to top that one quality-wise. I'm happy to hear you say I'm able to paint a clear picture though, that's always important to me when I'm reading something.

Cliffhanger-ish endings... I always hate when episodes of my favorite TV shows end on them, when season finales pull cliffhangers it can be infuriating. I do feel like they've been the best way to end the chapters of this story so far though. If I'm doing them right, like you said, the readers should be anxious to read what comes next and even spend a little time imagining the events that will take place in the following chpater(s). Although I suppose this could potentially be bad. You and the other readers could imagine something really brilliant will unfold in the next chapter and then when you read it you're met with disappointment, haha. Hopefully that won't be the case.

I'm really glad you mentioned the non-canon chapter. You're actually the first person to do so, out of both here and on giantesscity. I've been considering taking that chapter down and was going to do so today and maybe add it in again somewhere down the road but then I read your review.

But anyways, thanks for reading and reviewing, I'm glad you're enjoying so far and I hope you'll continue to be able to.

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 02 2013 12:48 AM Title: Chapter 5

Great chapter and again great details. But I may just be reading to much into it but them getting Claire's help so easily has me worried. But at any rate I can't wait to see what happens next, an hope that there will be some pretty toes/feet involved.

aaron
PS why did he use an older machine to show off to his friends and not the newer fancy one?

Author's Response:

Thanks again for reading and reviewing.

In Chapter...2? I believe it was 2... anyways, Michael says that he chose to show off the older machine because it's just visually more exciting. So basically, he just wanted to show that original version off because it looked "cooler" whereas the model he sent Claire to fetch is more practical, but far less interesting to look at.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 01 2013 11:38 PM Title: Chapter 1

This kind of reminds me of like honey we shrunk the kids or something. There is no crush or vore or trying to keep people as pets (so far) its nice and a change of pace from other stories on this site.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. I don't want to reveal anything I have planned for the future of this story, but I do hope you continue to enjoy it.

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 30 2013 11:40 AM Title: Chapter 4

This was masterfully written. I loved all the details an how long it tooh to get to the house. Now that Claire appears to notice them you can take this any way you want which makes it better for the readers. I can't wait to see what happens next.

aaron

Author's Response:

WOW, thanks for the praise. I was hoping I wouldn't bore everyone but I wanted to stress the distance between the two houses. Thank you for continuing to read and review the story!

Reviewer: codeman83 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 30 2013 6:51 AM Title: Chapter 1

Oh man first contact with a giantess, can't wait to see how she reacts to the tiny vehicle

And its occupants.  She may want to have a bit of fun with them before helping them out,

who knows maybe she's playful?

Reviewer: codeman83 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 24 2013 10:51 AM Title: Chapter 3

Wow the shrunken truck interaction is amazing, love the idea of a normal sized girl handling

A shrunken vehicle like a toy! Hope there is even more interactions with the truck, and maybe some chase action?

Great story so far keep up the good work!



Author's Response:

I don't currently have plans for a "chase" scene, but I will say we haven't seen the last of the truck. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: rubber Signed [Report This]
Date: May 24 2013 10:48 AM Title: Chapter 3

great story so far



Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: thewiseman Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 23 2013 5:54 PM Title: Chapter 1

Holy Crap! Great descriptions so far (3 chapters), just the right amount of detail, events are unfolding just quickly enough. Keep it up!



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 22 2013 11:35 PM Title: Chapter 3

Was not expecting Amy to be shrunken as well. Great plot twist. Also her playing with Jim's truck was as good as it gets, as far as gentle foot/toe play goes. An I can't wait to see where this story goes because clearly I have no idea.

aaron

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