Date: August 31 2017 2:26 AM Title: Chapter 4
I want change place with Jack...
Date: October 05 2015 12:09 PM Title: Chapter 4
What's with her finger anyway? Hopefully Jack will be alright in there. Wouldn't it be tough being in a sock?
[Report This]Date: February 17 2014 11:17 PM Title: Chapter 4
I know I'm a little behind, but thats ok... right?
anyways, I have to give you props for the in-sock content. This line in particular made my day...
"To anyone else, it would seem like Tricia was smushing a bug forcefully. No, she was just stepping on her tiny boyfriend."
This line was clever. before this line it was all from Jack's perspective, but this line gave the reader two perspectives to create a mental picture from.
Well done. Look foward to reading more.
[Report This]Date: May 22 2013 2:23 AM Title: Chapter 4
The problem is what for does she need her finger so badly right now... why not just enjoy the moment - and why so quickly annoyed? I'd rather think she would be overjoyed by his passion...
I understand the plan for a slight turn to domination, but seriously... Otherwise was good.
Author's Response:
She is! Twas a game they were playing in which Jack doth achieved a stalemate!
[Report This]Date: May 21 2013 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 4
I love feet chs and new characters.Im glad your adding more characters, it helps expand the story.
Vegeta's Brother??? Wht i Didnt know he had a brother. I cant answer without cheating. Is it in the Bardock movie? Wow good question.