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Reviewer: Flaming_Heart Signed [Report This]
Date: August 25 2013 9:13 PM Title: Chapter 17: Matriarchs

Yeah it was a bit of a change throwing in the other characters.

It was interesting but I still like reading about Ramsey and Kiri.

But nice chapter.



Author's Response:

I try to keep focus on Kiri and Ramsey as they are the main character but sometimes you have to focus on others to create a more fleshed-out world. Don't worry focus will shift back on them soon.

Reviewer: Story smith Signed [Report This]
Date: August 25 2013 9:02 PM Title: Chapter 17: Matriarchs

You add character development by doing what you did. You let everyone know that everyone has a story and everyone has a reason to win the tournament. If anyone complains about that they are a fuckin idiot and don't appreciate the artistry that goes into making a story great. And personally I kinda like your elf she kinda cool but Kiri reason for winning is more interesting.

Author's Response:

I'm really trying to show that everyone has a stake in this good or bad. More intrigue about characters and thier motivations are coming. I'm really trying to make this story a good one.

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