Date: May 01 2013 4:03 AM Title: Chapter 3
When do their parents (and other people they know) come into this? They would notice her missing, perhaps shrunken, (straight away in the case of parents) and would be concerned. It's an interesting story, but I didn't feel it was very believable as niether girl really considered the implications of their actions. However, I do like the ending.
Author's Response:
Stubbornstain, I just wrote this up as a quick intro to writing. The plotline is nonexistent and this was really just 3 chapters of erotica. Believability is minimal because once more, I didn't even have a plotline. If it pleases you, I am writing up a story WITH a plotline. When I start it up, maybe you could comment on that?
[Report This]Date: April 27 2013 9:08 PM Title: Chapter 3
great story. Kept me interested throughout
[Report This]Date: April 27 2013 2:46 PM Title: Chapter 3
Ah, a swerve.
Well played.
[Report This]Date: April 27 2013 1:54 PM Title: Chapter 3
Great new chapter, it sad that its the last one. Your first dtory is great. !0 stars all around for this one. Cannot wait to see your next works. BTW I hope you stick to the violent scenarios. Its my cup of tea and you have a nack for writing it.