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Reviewer: BigAl Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 01 2013 4:13 AM Title: Chapter 1

A good start! Looking forward to see where it goes!

Reviewer: MadWhitePaper Signed [Report This]
Date: February 27 2013 5:06 PM Title: Chapter 1

The action felt a little forced and pointless,I like the premise but the wording seems rushed. It's not a bad story it just needs a better pace and plot to it.



Author's Response:

Im an admitted impatient writer,and thus my pacing is subpar.I hope that it will continue to improve with each passing chapter that I write.We learn more from our mistakes  more than our failures i've learned.Thanks for the input(I appreciate any and all of it good or bad)

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