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Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: December 31 2012 12:06 PM Title: intro 1

Alex's achievements don't sound at all realistic. This chapter was actually rtaher amusing and I liked it in a weird sort of way.

Also:

Her name was holy and was 17 years old

You mean Holly not holy.



Author's Response:

Sorry about that mistake, but I am not the best proof reader. I based some of the "achievement's" of thing's I did and madethem a bit more cool. Note I said some not all and I know it does not sound that realistic, but you find out more about how he was able to do some thing's. Writing is one of my weakest subjects, so I am not really working with my natural skills here. Thanks for the feedback and hope to hear more.

 

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