Reviewer: Michael1258 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 18 2013 12:28 PM Title: Panties

Keep it up man. This is awesome. I like the descriptions. Better than I could ever do. My personal suggestion is to keep it unaware, it just makes sense. something that small should not be spotted. Throw your character into a bunch of horrible situations: sex with the boyfriend, being nearly eaten, lost in certain laces and picked up by someone else. I dont know what to tell you about an ending so far.

Author's Response:

I'll do what I can to continue the plight of Derrick.  His journey is far from over.  Thanks for the comments.