Date: February 14 2013 5:37 PM Title: Chapter 4
Cool! The cat fight has started.
Here:
err, "acquaintance" of me.
You mean "of mine".
And here:
We know each other for a long time, and I can tell you I cannot express my dislike or my desire to see her vanquished.
I think you mean:
We've known each other for a long time, and I cannot stress enough how much I dislike her or my desire to see her vanquished.
Author's Response:
English is not my native language, so I do make some grammar errors. Nice of you to piont it out, so I can use that for my future stories.
The other explanaion would be Marian's translator doesn't work 100% correct....
Author's Response:
English is not my native language, so I do make some grammar errors. Nice of you to piont it out, so I can use that for my future stories.
The other explanation would be Marian's translator doesn't work 100% correct....
[Report This]Date: October 16 2011 9:57 AM Title: Chapter 4
Good dramatic tension in this chapter. It's interesting to see the dynamic between Paul, Luke, and Dennis as well. Marcia's a nice, classic villain, it sounds like. I look forward to seeing what comes next.