Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19 2013 8:02 AM Title: Chapter 1

for me to go into any detail I'll have to read an examine the story again, but I think the main thing was a lack of premise, like why they are on Earth. Although come to think of it, if you're planning a sequel, I'm sure any concerns I had about the plot will be addressed in that.

 

Author's Response:

Oh, the reason they are on Earth is mentioned in the story, chapter 2. The cone device Marian and the others hunted probably had a malfunction, and set course to Earth from Alpha Centauri. Marian illegally crossed the borders and Marcia follwed her to get (steal) the cone.