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Reviewer: vegetaboy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 16 2024 7:06 AM Title: Chapter 1: Saturday Night Nerves

Great start to the story here.

I've glimpsed at some of the future chapters and skimmed them over, and going to give this a proper read.

......Will they ever be discovered? or is this going for a bad end? XD

I mean, ten years of being 'gone'/dead/dissapeared, etc.

But if they can be *seen*....

(I did read most of the most recent chapter, that title 'paint job' is perfect for it)



Author's Response:

Thanks for checking it out, vegetaboy. At this point the plot is still very open ended and so many different things could happen. I have some vague ideas how everything will  conclude, but nothing's in stone yet. 

Reviewer: Flagpole_Sitta97 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 03 2024 7:20 PM Title: Chapter 1: Saturday Night Nerves

Really love the attention to detail, reminds me of my writing style a lot when they talk more in detail about the things surrounding them and how they interact with the world. I find the 2nd person POV very interesting as well too, that's something you don't see all too much on this website. This is a really well written story and I LOVE the time travel aspect too. 

Really liked our main character's time in Vanessa's belly, hope we get more similar situations in the future (:



Author's Response:

Thanks for the comment! 2nd person is natural for me to write from reading a lot of writing.com interactives, but I wouldn't do it for every story. I usually prefer 1st person. Getting eaten is a good old standby and fun to write, so I don't think this will be the last time Fuzz willl get mistaken for an edible.

Reviewer: Jurdzi Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20 2024 12:31 PM Title: Chapter 1: Saturday Night Nerves

Please please continue. Do not let the dust collect and settle on this one. There are many more unfortunate advantures waiting for these 2 poor souls. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for your continued interest in this story, Jurdzi. Don't worry, it's not on ice. I'm currently juggling this one and Boytoy. And yeah, there are all kinds of different crazy things that can happen and I want to explore as much as I can. I still plan to finish it.

Reviewer: johnsmith10992 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 29 2023 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 1: Saturday Night Nerves

Well-written but unaware objects aren’t really my cup of tea. I’m still a big fan of your stories though. Any chance you’ll return to a more traditional shrinking story anytime soon?



Author's Response:

Thanks for your feedback, johnsmith. I have to admit I deliberately tried to make this one as different from prev. stories as possible. So there's minimal dialogue/interaction, and basically allows me to write some unaware things that I couldn't in other stories. Also gave me a small break from J&J so I don't accidentally copy myself. But unaware does sacrifice interaction and character relations, so I get if you feel like it's missing here. That's a fair drawback. If I could write something else like J&J or with the development that story got, that would be great and that's my unofficial goal. 

As well as UTO (this story) I'm currently writing something that is more like J&J or at least typical tiny/GTX relations, dialogue, etc. It's got some characters I like so far, but still in a rough state. Once details are cleaned up I can start posting it. The plot is not even clear; anything I say about it is subject to change. 

 

Reviewer: Jurdzi Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 27 2023 9:25 AM Title: Chapter 11: A Stirring Discussion

Amazing story. Immediately one of my favorites. I love all these unaware and humiliating situations. Especially the last 2 chapters, where folks are talking about them, unaware of their presence. I really hope there is a lot more coming in. Maybe some lollipop or candy misplacement or more feet/heels related scenarios, perhaps nail painting?

Its very refreshening to see the new characters.

Keep up this great work!



Author's Response: Thanks for commenting! There's so many different scenarios that are possible on this idea. The boys could literally be turned into anything, and the things you've suggested happen to be things I really like as well, so it's likely the story will go there. 

Reviewer: Jadder Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 26 2023 9:31 PM Title: Chapter 11: A Stirring Discussion

I’ve never found the story with this kind of plot and I love it!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Jadder Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 09 2023 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 1: Saturday Night Nerves

I found this gem of a story and I hope you complete it! There’s so many that don’t get completed on this site.

I gave her the wrong rating at first so I deleted and reposted

Author's Response: Thanks for your feedback! I'm guilty of this myself but I intend to finish this one.

Reviewer: grael Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 08 2023 6:47 PM Title: Chapter 7: Low Roller

This is a great start to the story. Can't wait to see if/when Courtney and Jake see them.



Author's Response:

Thanks for checking it out! 

Reviewer: Nayr Signed [Report This]
Date: September 16 2023 8:52 PM Title: Chapter 2: It’s 6pm do you know where you are?

Really enjoying the buildup for this story! Cant wait to see if Courtny waited the ten years or is he has to deal with missing his chance with her!



Author's Response:

Thanks for your feedback, I'm glad you're enjoying it so far. The story is sort of evolving at the rate I write it, so I can't really say too much at this point.

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