[Report This]Date: July 23 2023 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 3 - Elizabeth 'Liz' Sanchez
Wanted to keep my review for volume I separate from my review(s) for this second continuation. Started reading yesterday night and found myself unable to stop, so I binged it. Now that we are in volume II, things aren't going as I saw them in my own mind.
It is pretty obvious that Jacob and Annie "Gullivette" will eventually meet face to face, I'm very curious to see what their history is and how they know each other. Also curious to see more about Jinshin and Benjamin, though admittedly you make their interactions seem odd, I'm sure you have something in mind for them that will lead to somethign, just not sure what.
This entire chapter itself with Deita and Jacob and Liz was something else. Deita has evolved to be far more complex than I gave her credit for, it seems she isn't the pure fetish pumper I initially thought you designed her to be. I believed she was just an avenue for you to be able to focus on some of the kinkier stuff, as the audience surely craves, but now we are getting a highlight into her actual motives, maybe, still not sure.
Seeing Jacob on the receiving end of Deita's "desires" as you call it, was quite pleasant. Though, it seems that Liz is indeed a goner now, who else would have the power to save her now? I'd say Benjamin, but that's doubtful, as you have made Jinshin to be some sort of an expert in prowess and intuitive nature. This entire story seems hopeless for the victims, which is my only concern because I do prefer a relatively happy ending, but it is too soon to call that so I'll hold my tongue.
I do have some questions for you regarding a few of the details of this story, that I find familiar, so expect a discord message from me (it'll be an alternate username that I prefer to keep private from here)
Otherwise, good work and you have me hooked. Look forward to talking with you directly regarding this story, I have some questions for you.
Author's Response:
I'll keep an eye out for you on discord, and thanks for the reviews they're appreciated! I'll admit my entire plan with Jinshin and Ben has not worked out as intended originally, but I really want to avoid spoilers so I'll keep you to your thoughts for the time being :)
Glad you're enjoying the story so far!