Date: May 24 2023 4:34 AM Title: Chapter 9 - The Drop off
Wow, Leah is amazing! You have a great way of introducing the women. When Sophia was introduced, I really liked her character, however, she seemed a bit too cruel when she murdered the other tinies.
With Leah, I absolutely love her bubbly caring demeanor and her flirty side. Also, the side story with George is fantastic! Part of me wished she had a naughty student instead of a coworker. (I know she teaches at an elementary school. I just like giantess teachers with tiny students. A college student would be perfect if he was George.)
Anyway, it’s interesting to see Leah be nice to one tiny and then naughty with another.
I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Date: May 18 2023 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 5 - The Aftermath
This whole story is great. I'm interested to see Leah introduced. Maybe she isn't as nice as she seems and she keeps him trapped in her butt while she teaches. Or maybe Sophia just decides to keep him and flys to Perth with him between her cheeks.
Date: May 12 2023 2:50 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Heading Home
Shouldn't this be MISDV instead of MSIDV?
Author's Response: Ah a typo, good spot, thanks!
Date: May 11 2023 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 5 - The Aftermath
I appreciate the fact that Sophia didnt Immediately turn on and kill her BF when he was out off by the tiny crushing. I've ready enough of these stories that I felt that cliché coming and its more of a twist now whem it doesn't happen. Eager to see where this goes. The tension builds.
Date: May 11 2023 5:26 PM Title: Chapter 5 - The Aftermath
Great chapter. Loving the story and where this seems headed. The shrinky’s anger management is going to be his demise, methinks. One suggestion - for describing internal thoughts, you might wanna switch from single apostrophe quotes to simply using italics. I noticed some of the best authors doing so and switched to doing so on my stories after about my 2nd completed story. Note - the mechanics for editing a chapter here are very easy.
Date: May 11 2023 2:30 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Heading Home
I hope Sophie will have attitude of a bigger person and try to understand and comfort her man. Maybe she can be gentle with other captives and make him envious? That would be funny.
Date: May 10 2023 6:06 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Her First
Whoa! This is hot!
Is this actually your first story?! You write like a veteran! I love the world building and the background information about the virus.
That first section with the 3 young women was amazing! I love how you made it seem as if they were giggling at the main character, but actually it was toward a little guy. It was clever and I am wondering if you are planning more scenes with other characters rather than just the main character and Sophia now.
Also, the way you create suspense is phenomenal! I’m literally at the edge of my seat for each chapter, and it’s exciting and makes me nervous of all the shrunken guys and I love it! Even the little flashback scene with Greg’s friends was amazing! Love how they got taken 1 by 1.
For the 3 girls scene, I liked how they acted similar but slightly different. Usually when there’s a giantess group, their personalities are complete polar opposites, but this feels more realistic. Hannah was the nice but teasing one. Ellen was the teasing, but dominant one. And Clare was the teasing and sadistic one. They all teased Greg similarly, but had their own ideas of what to do with him. Amazing!
The scenes with Sophia were amazing! The dialogue is top tier! The foreshadowing about swallowing him whole and then the part where you explain how the rich could take advantage of this situation and then state that Sophia is rich. I knew something would happen, but I didn’t expect that, so I loved how you presented everything so far.
Man, I’m in love with the start of this story! Right now I’m just hoping for some more stories with other shrunken guys and perhaps more kinky scenes. Otherwise, perfect start so far and I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Yep, long time reader first time writer!
Thanks for your feedback and review - I hope to make this vary a lot with some interesting characters!
Date: May 10 2023 5:35 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Heading Home
Enjoying the story. Interesting world setup in the first chapter - gives you lots of options to play with. I'll rate once the story concludes, but well written thus far.
Thanks for your feedback, I hope you enjoy wherever this leads!
Date: May 09 2023 9:52 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Heading Home
Damn looks good so far, hope the girlfriend stays gentle and doesn’t kill him tho like the usual cliches. Would be a nice change of pace
Thanks for the feedback! No idea where the story is going yet, but hope you like where it heads