[Report This]Date: May 12 2023 2:36 AM Title: Chapter 3: Margaret and Oscar
So long Oscar you piece of shit {literally Margaret's piece of shit}. HOORAY for Margaret!
Hopefully this is not the end to your fantastic story. It has so much more potential {think of the government official entering Clara's domain to judge her. Quite a pool of hypnotic subjects for her personal use}. A couple of following chapters, which would be nice and greatly appreciated, could be:
Clara informs Sophia that Oscar is lost, perhaps mistakenly believed shrunken into oblivion for non-conformesn. The two women could get together to find both a replacement shrunken man as a specific baby for Sophia, and a replacement shrunken sex toy for Clara. The idea of Sophia picking out an arbitrary guy to be shrunk down to be her baby, rather than her husband, would make a great story line {even a separate story for you to pursue}; as would his friend, coworker, or just some guy becoming Clara's diminutive sex toy would be nice.
Margaret now develops an appetite for swallowing virgins. Somehow having sex with virgins reduces the spent men into swallow-able sized snacks. It could be all she eats from now on.
If you end this story, BRAVO!!! Well done! If you continue this story, I look forward to your future work.
One last thought, you may want to proofread you work a bit more, you often write "his" instead of "her" and other such little mistake. It disrupts the continuity of your story, though nothing which takes away from your overall story. You simply have some grammatical errors here and there.
Author's Response: That is a lot of ideas. I like it. I could use some of them later. It will mostly be one-shots if the story continues. I completed it but left it open ended for one-shot chapters or other mini-series in the chronicles. I hope you like where it went. Thank you for pointing the grammatical errors out. I went through it to look for the switched"his" and "her" and other errors.
[Report This]Date: May 11 2023 4:03 PM Title: Chapter 3: Margaret and Oscar
She should test to see just how small people can actually get. Does telling their one inch, or once centimetre, send them to that size. There are also people who would like to live being a tiny and under the care of their SO(s).
And also organise someone to go out to some field and see how big they can grow.
Or if they can have the power to consciously alter their size, cause that would also lead to practicing it and seeing its true limits.
And also maybe giving a woman the ability to do anything in high heeled footwear. Someone would ask for that.
And there have to be some lesbian couples eventually coming in.
Author's Response: Those are good ideas. I might implement them. The consciously altering their size is interesting. I will have to think of some psychology jargon for that. She mostly does it when she believes that she is helping the person. So requests aren't always fulfilled. She has to be careful about it so she doesn't get caught by the government or such. But I can see her having to do a test of sorts with sizes for a psychiatrist convention where she has to bring some psychology aspect to it.