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Reviewer: DcZ Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 20 2023 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 1: Margaret

Pretty good ‘conclusion’ to the ‘into’. 

Idea pretty much have been given.

Only two that I could add: someone is shrunk and then also told that they are extremely malleable but durable, that way they can be used without injury as an insole. The other is seeing the true limits of this therapy, even more so then telling specific sizes, (considering it can somehow change Hair) see if they can change it to more unnatural colour (someone who dons’t want to use dye and want it to grow that way), have particular patterns on the skin. Then how far limbs can be modified and if new in could be grown, cause some people would absolutely like to have cat ears or tails, and the other related animal traits. Extreme, but needs testing. 

Thought on further thought, and lightly less extreme, can senses be enhanced and his far. Cause human hear is already so food that only a few weeks and someone could actually hear all air moving in a room. So enhancement to eyesight to get more wavelengths might also be usfull. Possibly even to Clara.




Author's Response: Thanks. Glad that it was well received. I can see some of those idea in the future. The different hair colors into a non natural one. The cat ears and tail, or other animal parts, would be hard. There are specific people that it would work on, like a vet who knows the intricacies of an animal. The increase in senses is very likely. I could see Clara making someone very small and the person caring for that person will need better hearing or sight to find a person that is very small. The malleable and durable is the hardest. It would be literally getting rid of all the bones in a person and then making the skin unbreakable to hold everything inside. She could definitely make all the organs malleable. It's just the bones that make it hard.

Reviewer: D W Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 12 2023 2:36 AM Title: Chapter 3: Margaret and Oscar

So long Oscar you piece of shit {literally Margaret's piece of shit}.  HOORAY for Margaret!

Hopefully this is not the end to your fantastic story.  It has so much more potential {think of the government official entering Clara's domain to judge her.  Quite a pool of hypnotic subjects for her personal use}.  A couple of following chapters, which would be nice and greatly appreciated, could be:

Clara informs Sophia that Oscar is lost, perhaps mistakenly believed shrunken into oblivion for non-conformesn.  The two women could get together to find both a replacement shrunken man as a specific baby for Sophia, and a replacement shrunken sex toy for Clara.  The idea of Sophia picking out an arbitrary guy to be shrunk down to be her baby, rather than her husband, would make a great story line {even a separate story for you to pursue}; as would his friend, coworker, or just some guy becoming Clara's diminutive sex toy would be nice.

Margaret now develops an appetite for swallowing virgins.  Somehow having sex with virgins reduces the spent men into swallow-able sized snacks.  It could be all she eats from now on.

If you end this story, BRAVO!!!  Well done!  If you continue this story, I look forward to your future work.

One last thought, you may want to proofread you work a bit more, you often write "his" instead of "her" and other such little mistake.  It disrupts the continuity of your story, though nothing which takes away from your overall story.  You simply have some grammatical errors here and there.



Author's Response: That is a lot of ideas. I like it. I could use some of them later. It will mostly be one-shots if the story continues. I completed it but left it open ended for one-shot chapters or other mini-series in the chronicles. I hope you like where it went. Thank you for pointing the grammatical errors out. I went through it to look for the switched"his" and "her" and other errors.

Reviewer: DcZ Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 11 2023 4:03 PM Title: Chapter 3: Margaret and Oscar

She should test to see just how small people can actually get. Does telling their one inch, or once centimetre, send them to that size. There are also people who would like to live being a tiny and under the care of their SO(s).

And also organise someone to go out to some field and see how big they can grow. 

Or if they can have the power to consciously alter their size, cause that would also lead to practicing it and seeing its true limits. 


And also maybe giving a woman the ability to do anything in high heeled footwear. Someone would ask for that. 


And there have to be some lesbian couples eventually coming in. 



Author's Response: Those are good ideas. I might implement them. The consciously altering their size is interesting. I will have to think of some psychology jargon for that. She mostly does it when she believes that she is helping the person. So requests aren't always fulfilled. She has to be careful about it so she doesn't get caught by the government or such. But I can see her having to do a test of sorts with sizes for a psychiatrist convention where she has to bring some psychology aspect to it.

Reviewer: D W Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 05 2023 3:25 AM Title: Chapter 2: Oscar and Sophia

Great chapter, love the beneath Clara's ass sitting.  Will be interesting as to how Clara turns Oscar into Sophia's little submissive.



Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it. I hope you will enjoy to see how Oscar behaves under Clara. And how that turns out

Reviewer: D W Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 29 2023 2:13 AM Title: Chapter 1: Margaret

Excited to see where this story goes, especially if Clara can make some one smaller.



Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it. That is what happens in the next chapter.

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