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Reviewer: blue06 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 09 2023 5:16 PM Title: Fred Drilling's fate.

Hope can see the unaware pantyhose tf ! Maybe body swap with clothing in the wrong wish 

Reviewer: Jsmith20 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 09 2023 9:38 AM Title: Fred Drilling's fate.

Alright, so far this is pretty good. I love a good isekai. My current main WIP is actually the second chapter of my "An OP Tiny MC Isekai Hero" story which I think you'd enjoy based on this. The first chapter is already uploaded if you're interested, which I think you might be be.

Now as to the actually story. Ted is definitely my favorite part and I think that's where the narrative focus should be. (I skipped the part with Jill once she was captured by the giant man because I'm only into giantesses.) I think you should break off Ted into his own story. Rebby seems very interesting and playful yet bashful which is an excellent mix. It would also be nice if instead of him losing his third boon he gets to wish to be indestructible so he can be a tiny and engage in all kinds of hijinx. I think you're also feeling a pull to him since his story is continuing. These are just my thoughts but I encourage you to focus on him and follow that path.

Reviewer: Lumberpanda Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 07 2023 8:15 AM Title: Fred Drilling's fate.

Definitely like where this is going!



Author's Response:

Hopefully I can live up to your expectations. Please enjoy the second chapter!

Reviewer: DcZ Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 06 2023 2:07 PM Title: Fred Drilling's fate.

Oh this is a great start, and there is So much potential. 

So I say continue on! Lets see where this goes!




Author's Response:

I put out a new chapter. I hope it's to you liking. Thanks for the support.

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