[Report This]Date: July 20 2023 3:23 PM Title: Natalie’s Work Week
As I comment I have a wide smile on my face. It seems even when only practicing people (me included) like your writing. That said, I am not sad Tim’s story is coming to a close since – like ‘Inari The Floof’ already commented - we know it was only practice for the lots of great works yet to come.
What I mean is I can’t wait for the release of Little Big Brother and Summer with my Stepsister – but you probably already knew that.
About the dialogue in this chapter, it went smooth as a show, don’t tell. What do I mean: altough I would agree with Julia, Natalie acts as a worrywart and doesn’t want to leave anything to chance, displaying the contrast between the two: Natalie is careful and also more anxious, while Julia is more extrovert and carefree/careless.
So, I am sorry for the people that wanted Jules to be an evil maniacal dominatrix. She isn’t (at least as far as I can tell). I must hold the urge of
making more theories – ‘bigfly20’ idea of Mackenzie not giving up is spot on.
Must… hold… the urge!! Anyway, there is a more important thing than my theories: you taking the time to practice, asking for the readers opinions and even responding to all the comments shows how much care and work you put
into this for us.
Thank you. A million times thank you! Hope everything is well. Stay safe!
Author's Response:
Yes, “Little, Big Brother” is going to be the next, big project for me, but there’s 2, maybe 3, small things I’d like to finish before really diving into writing that novel, specifically a short story about a tiny being stuck between his wife’s toes while she gives herself a foot massage, a scenario I’m planning to include in the upcoming novel, and finishing the alternate giantess chapter of “Babysitter Trouble”. There might be a quick story about a teenager getting shrunk while his younger sister hosts a pool party, but I don’t know how long that might turn out to be, and I really don’t want to jump into another multi-chapter project unless I have a clear outline and can confirm it’ll only be a few chapters long, if necessary.
I’ll be honest, chapters that are dialogue driven and have long conversations are something that I really have to take a long time writing and finalizing, because I have to make sure I hit the plot points I want to cover, while still making the dialogue feel smooth and natural. Often times, I find myself physically playing out the conversation out loud to make sure it sounds realistic.
So, as far as Julia’s personality, I wanted her to be playful and domineering, and not just jump to downright maliciously evil. I do like a domineering, even resentful giantess, but one who reaches that point naturally over the course of being around a tiny person for a while, and discovering just how much fun she can have tormenting the tiny in various ways.
In conclusion, I am really liking my idea for the “Scenario Series” to practice some of my scenarios, encounters, and interactions for writing practice. I really think this is going to vastly improve the quality of my novels going forward.
Thank you for your high praise and support!
[Report This]Date: July 20 2023 2:23 AM Title: Natalie’s Work Week
Hi me again, I am sad this story is coming to a close. However I know you have great works to come and your writing style is fantastic. I also love how you have the protagonist never give up and not break and get something akin to Stockholm Syndrome because of their torture and them getting a happy ending when they didn't deserve the torture in the first placeyour stories as it's something you don't see to often on this site with a flow like that as if stories like that exist they aren't finsihed. It's refreshing. Anyway I look forward to all your works no matter the ending because once again above all else you are an amazing writer! Stay foxy my friend!!
Author's Response:
Well, I do usually like to have some kind of a happy ending in my stories, but that may not always be the case going forward. Unfortunately, my previous attempts at having “sad” or an “open-ended” conclusion to my stories were not well-received, but that was probably more to do with the ultimate execution in my writing as opposed to people not liking unhappy endings. Moving forward, I just need to make sure that if I plan to write a “bad ending” to a story, it needs to fit the story and plot narratives, and, at least, have it make sense or leave things open to continuations if I so choose.
As far as the whole “Stockholm Syndrome” narrative, it wouldn’t really play out as a tiny liking his torture or being tormented. It would probably develop more like a tiny person developing a crush on a gentle giantess, and developing a “fetish” for their features (e.g. developing a foot fetish after seeing a giantess’s sole from a new angle, and then wanting to be rolled around under her feet or cradled in between her soles).
Anyway, thanks for reading and sharing your insights.
[Report This]Date: July 20 2023 1:25 AM Title: Natalie’s Work Week
Sad to be seeing this story ending so soon, but I understand wanting to stick with the week long structure.
First thing that crossed my mind for Tim ending up in the casserole would be for him to climb onto someone’s plate as he attempts to get some food, only for the owner of the plate to not notice him on it (maybe due to other food items on the plate already) to then lift the plate over the casserole as they are adding food to their plate.
One thing I had hoped to see at some point during this story was some more unaware interactions between Nat and Tim. Most of all some unaware in shoe interactions where Julie had put Tim or trapped Tim in his mother’s footwear. Possibly having Julie reverse blackmailing Tim with lies about Tim constantly going near Julie’s feet due to some bizarre fantasies of his. That Julie hadn’t told Nat about because she didn’t want Nat to worry. Julie puts him in his mother’s shoes both for his torture and to give credence to her lie about Tim trying to indulge himself.
Whatever you decide to do to finish out this story, I definitely will be looking forward to it. I’ll also be on the lookout for your future stories.
Author's Response:
Yeah, the week-long structure provided a few key aspects to the story while also ensuring it stayed relatively concise.
Tim clinging to a plate was also one of the few ideas I’ve been kicking around. I’m just not exactly sure how to properly implement it yet.
I actually hadn’t considered Julia manipulating the situation by telling Natalie that Tim had acquired a foot fetish while shrunk. It’s certainly a scenario worth exploring, if not for this story, for future ones. Having a shrunken person exploring a newfound fantasy as they get smaller, however, would be a more natural, realistic way of getting that tiny into trouble.
But fear not, while the story is coming to a close, there’s still plenty of fun planned. Friday evening is going to be a two-parter, and I’ve been kicking around lots of ideas as to what kind of trouble Tim can get himself into. I’ve already got the first few details figured out—just need to get them written.
[Report This]Date: July 19 2023 8:50 PM Title: Natalie’s Work Week
Please don't let this story end. It is wonderful. I would like to see Natalie come back with the antedote, but it works much slower on humans and requires multiple doses. The amount she brings home only grows him back a couple of inches and unfortunately Natalie gets called away on business and asks Julia to take Tim to her house until she gets back in another week.
Author's Response:
Lol! I know that a lot of people have gotten really attached to this story, but it’s got to end at some point. I can’t keep it going forever; I have other stories I want to get to. Besides I really don’t like it when stories just go on and on with no sign of ending, and this site is way to full of stories that had promising starts, but the author(s) just abandoned writing and never finished.
But, given your suggestion, I think you like how the story wraps up…plus, there’s always the possibility of a sequel if enough readers really want one.
[Report This]Date: July 19 2023 3:58 PM Title: Natalie’s Work Week
Aunt Julia really does have to make this afternoon enjoyable. She isn't going to have this chance again. (unless she steals some of the shrinking chemical.) I think that she should put him inside her vagina again. She knows how amazing it feels so she would want to do it again. Maybe keep him in there for a little bit while she does other things. Maybe Mckenzie comes by for Tim but can't find him because he is in Aunt Julia's pussy. He struggles inside giving Aunt Julia pleasure as Mckenzie searches. Mckenzie won't be able to search there on Aunt Julia. If not that way, I still think that the pussy is good. Maybe the nipple before, Aunt Julia forces Tim to cum into her nipple before putting him in her pussy. Just some idea rambling. I just think she needs to satisfy some sexual craving before Tim returns to normal
Author's Response:
Well, your scenario is certainly intriguing. Not sure it’s exactly what I want to add to this story for the end, but certainly a scenario that I will integrate into a future story, so thanks for the suggestion.
I think the rest of the afternoon is going to be eluded to in an afterthought, but I can certainly see Julia using Tim for one last “self-gratification” session. 😉
[Report This]Date: July 19 2023 1:44 PM Title: Natalie’s Work Week
I hope just as Natalie is about to leave, the rabbits shrink back down, meaning the antidote doesn’t work.
Author's Response:
I can certainly say that this was something I had considered, and I absolutely think it’s a good idea, but I think I’m going to go in a slightly different direction for this story.
However, as I really like this particular idea, I’m most definitely going to use it in a future story once I find the right one!