[Report This]Date: May 26 2023 8:10 PM Title: Friday Morning
The description of Tim’s inner feelings on being inside the aquarium was very well writen. I really feelt the oppression and fear, it seemed authentic and thoughtfull. Now, let’s talk about some characters.
First Natalie. I will not say she is dense or dumb because she is presented as a streesfull person, who doesn’t try to soothe her son’s fears. This is not out of malice but, in my opinion, because of the surreal situation she is in and the fear of word getting out and loosing not only her job but also Tim guardianship. Also, her pushing Tim away and refuse to linten stems from an ever bigger fear of hurting her son.
There are two other problems that add to the precariousness of her situation. 1. the more time passes, more likely Tim is of staying the way he is or shrink even more. 2. as time passes more and more tangled Julia becomes in her power trip over Tim.
I said tangled because Julia would not go as far as killing her own nephew, that is just Tim's perspective playing up the situation, but she is in a surreal situation as much as her sister and is losing control of herself and her fantasies But my guess is she will get a reality shock after Tim manages to escape his prison house.
Now about the most important character introduced outside of the family we have Tim’s crush and neighbor: Mackenzie. She is short tempered and, like 9 out of 10 teenagers, has a deep need to be perceived as a capable adult. Those are very interesting traits actually as her encounter with Tim might loosen her a bit – I can totally see Tim convincing Mackenzie to play with him and I mean really play like chasing him while making noises and having real fun like a kid for the first time in a long time. Plus, Mackenzie seems to be very perceptive about details – she immediatelly identified the “bug” at her feet was no bug at all - so if Tim shrinks again she is the most likely to spot him.
Why some moody neighbour would do that for Tim? Well, maybe she is not willing at first, but Tim is the one most drowned in this surreal situation, abused by his aunt, pushed away by his mother and maybe forever trapped in a gigantic world, so he clearly could use some shenanigans to cheer up. And Mackenzie might really enjoy tiny Tim’s perspective of her, their meeting helping Mackenzie to really grow… as a person! As a person kkkkkkkk.
Been a long time since my last comment, but I am reading and I am liking. And I can’t wait for your other stories to come out too!
As always, thanks for writing and sharing with us. At this point I am just repeating myself but I love your feet scenarios! Peace and stay safe!
Author's Response:
Well, first off, let me say that I’m always happy to hear from one of my most avid readers and reviewers.
Right now, it might be too late to really address Natalie’s anxieties, but I think it’s something that I will allude to when we see her again, and really play up her…whoops, almost spoiled the ending for ya. 😉
As far as Julia, I know this story really seems to jump to Julia being the dominating giantess, but I wanted to keep the story somewhat short, and didn’t feel like I really had the time to truly evolve her into that role. It is a surreal situation, and it’s hard to say how a person would really react in that scenario. In my longer novels, I do want to take the time to evolve the playful and/or resentful giantess into the cruel, dominating type. I think this works best in the slow shrink genre, where the giantess changes and evolves as the main character gets smaller and smaller.
McKenzie wasn’t someone I had initially planned on including in the story, and her personality may not really fit the role of the playful giantess, but your ideas about how a playful character might react are certainly some food for thought. I’m thinking about including scenes in my upcoming novel, like a gentle giantess and tiny person taking a bath together, or maybe having a romantic interlude that truly feels natural and realistic.
Thanks for all the feedback and reviews!
[Report This]Date: May 26 2023 6:39 PM Title: Friday Morning
I like the idea of Tim being turned on a bit by the situations he is in with his Aunt. I hope he has a moment were he is turned on so much that he releases it on his Aunt. Hopefully when he is in her pussy or butt. She would notice to and tease him more for that. I like the battle he will have with thought of acting upon those feelings with his Aunt.
I know probably a lot of people have said a lot about Natalie's naivety about Tim's plight. I think it is find if there is an excuse for her naivety or continual naivety. What if she had a conversation with a coworker who saw her stressed at worked and super busy. This co-worker has a husband/wife that is a psychiatrist. Natalie is vague about the situation with Tim but the co-worker explains that Tim is not happy with the change and wants to find someone to blame. The blame has been falling on Aunt Julia. Natalie then views that Tim is projecting his anger and frustrations on Aunt Julia. Natalie would then feel bad for Aunt Julia and listen to her more. Just an idea
Author's Response:
Well, while I don’t like the idea of Tim being turned on by his aunt, I wanted to just briefly mention him being turned on by the hot girl next-door. It’s more of practice for my novel, where the tiny teenager starts realizing there might be some advantages to being small around a larger female he has a crush on.
I know Natalie’s naïveté is something that people have complained about, but it’s more of a plot device and wasn’t something I really wanted to take the time to develop, at least not in this story. However, your idea about having the mother character seek advice from a coworker is intriguing and something I’d certainly like to explore, maybe not for this story, but definitely for my next novel, so thank you for the suggestion.
Anyway, thanks for the review. I always look forward to hearing from you as you’re one of my more active reviewers.
[Report This]Date: May 25 2023 4:18 PM Title: Friday Morning
I'm always excited to read this story when a new chapter is released, that's how good this is! If you are still thinking about having one of the neighbor women in the later chapters, I'm interested in seeing more of the daughter (Mackenzie).
Author's Response: Well, I’m glad you appreciate my work.