Hot damn, honestly I wasn't sure you'd take my suggestion. Like I said, I don't like telling people how to write their own story. But not only did you take it, you ran with it. Those two chapters where better than anything i could have come up with.

Penelope is adorable. Love the way you wrote her. I like that Mike now has someone who'll care about his well being. I know his family loves him, but they don't seem to think much about what he goes through. I love her personality and I look forward to whatever kind of action they share between each other. I know you said at the beginning you weren't sure how much of a story you wanted to write with this, but all of the great characters make for a good plot on their own, so it's got plenty of potential. I really think she'll be the one to help Mike learn to enjoy the action.

Chapter 7 was very well done, and has got me anticipating whatever (and whomever) comes next. I'll be adding this one to my favorites so I know when the next chapter is out. You made a hell of a lot of progress in a relatively short amount of time, so feel free to take your time on the next ones, and thank you