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Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed [Report This]
Date: November 19 2022 1:08 AM Title: Chapter 1

Thanks for sharing. I can tell this story was written by somebody who was underage. Mark is clearly the self-insert for your younger self, and I'm guessing 'Penny' was whoever you were crushing on at the time. Either that or some amalgamation of your classmates you imagined.








Author's Response:

Damn you must be a mind reader because Penny is actually based on a girl I knew when I was 12 😄. Of course I changed the names before writing the story. 

But yeah I recommend you check out the stuff I currently write, especially the Antopia story because that is the primary story I will be focussing on over the next few months. 

The stories I currently are of much higher quality 

Thank you for reviewing 🙂

Reviewer: supernatural Signed [Report This]
Date: November 11 2022 11:33 PM Title: Chapter 1

its pretty standard stuff, not bad for something you did when you were twelve. i was expecting a lot of errors. I'd say if you wanted to flesh it out go for it

Author's Response:

Thanks for your review 🙂

Yeah I was actually curious to compare my writing from when I was 12 to when I am 22 now to see how much my writing has improved. I recommend you read the stuff I published now because they a lot more interesting and better. 

PS: I fixed up all the spelling errors before publishing 😄


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