Reviewer: squashed123 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 20 2022 3:50 PM Title: Chapter Six, Dancing with Her Devil

Alright, I'll be patient then. But if you are still sort of in the intro phase, why not throw in a couple of problems that don't resolve themselves? It would make for much better reading. E.g. the manager/owner of the restaurant is prejudiced against mixed-size couples, but May, who is awesome, isn't magically there to fix the problem even before it arose. Again, that's just one example of what you could have done. Then Micha would have to scramble (and prove to the readers why they should care about him...), and there might be a strain on Juni so we get to see a hint of what might look like.

It's either that or longer chapters were something actually happens. You sort of say it yourself, you're talking about everyday stuff even though in this chapter he literally proposed to his gargantuan girlfriend. That should be a pivotal moment, not a "meh, we went to the restaurant and it was mildly annoying but it all turned out okay"-kinda thing. Just my two cents. You don't have to go overboard right away but even solving everyday problems can be interesting so long as they have to be solved (and it's actually really interesting from the tiny perspective, it adds so much). Thanks for your reply!

Author's Response:

I can see where you're coming from. Unfortunately, I can't go into any more detail on why I chose specific plot points, character motivations, etc without getting into spoiler territory (which isn't fun for anyone). All I can say is that these choices are intentional. Oh and if you want to chat my discord/email is in my bio. I don't want to flood the review section with a back and forth :)