Reviewer: Giantess Nation Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08 2023 9:37 AM Title: Chapter 18 - Sunday Funday

Hi! I just finished reading this chapter, so I thought I'd leave a review. I can see that it is your longest chapter so far, and I want to tell you that it is appreciated. Don't hold back on the writing or the details.

I left a couple reviews over a month ago and I know you read at least one of them because you responded to the first one. And that was before this chapter came out, so I did have some thoughts in my head on how this chapter would turn out since Chapter 17. I did expect that Ostrov was going to be in a world of hurt because of how angry Kristen was in the last chapter, and my predictions turned out to be right. :)

But it wasn't quite what I predicted would happen. The assassins that tried to kill Justyna in the previous chapter seemed to have been pissed off by Kristen's lewd masturbation on the couch for all of Ostrov to see. So the thought that popped into my head was that Kristen was going to punish those assassins by masturbating herself over whatever city they were in, and I guess drowning them in her juices or something like that. I just thought that would be a more "poetic" punishment for them, since they would be killed by the very act that they tried to kill Justyna over. But oh well, either way they're certainly dead now. :) Along with, unfortunately, millions (?) of other Ostrovians.

Justyna has every right to be upset by this gratuitous slaughter of her people, so I am keenly intrigued by what the conversation that she will be having with Kristen in the next chapter will be like. They could have a complete falling out, a patching up, or really anything might happen. I'm very interested to find out how that goes. And yes, the animosity Ostrovians have to Justyna is still there, and actually no doubt even worse now, so this demonstration of power (which killed countless innocents in the process) has done nothing to make Ostrovians respect or love Justyna, but it may have made them fear her (by proxy). I note that this is the same dilemma Justyna's father faced himself, where he was damned either way when he tried to either interact with Kristen, or ignore her entirely. Either way is a losing prospect which results in millions of deaths regardless. And then to have your own people hate you for it to boot. Its not a good situation for any leader to be in, so I can imagine Justyna would be under that same stress and either want to retire from office (or follow her father's example). No matter who the "leader" of Ostrov is, they're ultimately just a puppet proxy ruler that answers to Kristen. Same goes for the micros in the city in the other room.

BTW, Ginny punishing the micros in Port Leslie with the stench of her feet was excellent. :) I like it because it humiliates them, but at the same time it doesn't cause a mass extinction event. Now that being said, in the case of the nanos in the other room it might be another story. The Micros "merely" suffered from the odor, but nanos being oh so very much smaller, it might actually be literally fatal to them. I'm no expert on the science involved here, but I do know that if you don't get enough oxygen, you die, and whatever the gasses that emanated from Ginny's stinky feet were, are definitely not oxygen. So its not just simply a matter of being an unpleasant thing to breath in her foot stink (though this is true), but since you're breathing that instead of breathable air, then you are probably going to literally die for real from it. And that's no joke (though the giantesses might think so).

I hope in the next chapter you'll give some account from the POV of the nanos on what the smell was like or did to them. Since her nyloned feet didn't linger over them for very long, and since there was some amount of time for them to air out as she walked through the hall without her heels on, that probably helped somewhat, but again, the nanos are massively smaller than the micros, so stuff is going to hit them a lot harder, including feet odor. If they got the Port Leslie treatment from Ginny's feet freshly extracted from the shoes, well it might have caused the death of millions in that vinegary scent... like a mustard gas attack during WW1 or something.

So far you've had the Micros cleaning Kristen's sandals and some heels, but though those are pretty bad (for them), it would be massively worse if they were made to clean a pair of jogging sneakers which are going to reek far worse. I think its also a much more degrading thing to force them to clean some plain old sneakers, since at least in the case of heels that is some classy footwear, but sneakers on the other hand are not. So not only is the smell worse, but its a more humiliating thing to be made to service. So consider that for the future.

Also please consider other things too, like sweaty socks, or Ginny's nylons like she wore in this chapter. As those can really soak up the smell also.  In fact, even more than shoes, probably. Just place a pair of sweaty socks in the room, and all the millions of people in the room are going to suffer just from it being in the room. Even moreso if they're made to clean them (though I don't know how they even would clean socks).

When I was reading that part about Kristen's silver heels, and how she wore them during her meetings with the micros and nanos and did some destruction with them and ultimately left them in the nano room to intimidate them, it occurred to me that it would be a good thing for your story to include the juxtaposition of Kristen wearing things like this in her normal every day life and her interactions with Madelyn, or work, or whatever, and then again later the devastating impact those same items have to the little people in the rooms. And this is something that can happen in reverse, because at the end of the chapter you wrote about her going to work with some micro crew trapped inside of her shoes, so she's taking them to work with her. And if you do write about her experience at work that day, you could say something about them inside her shoe, how she feels them, or if she takes them out to do something with them, or even from their own perspective, etc. But as for the other way around, I mean to say it makes for a great juxtaposition to write about how she had stepped on an ant during her time at work, and the squished remnants of the ant stuck to the show is then something extra the tinies have to deal with when cleaning them. Or, how she went on a date and went dancing and worked up a sweat, which again has some implications for the tinies when they are forced to deal with it. Or maybe, I dunno, Madelyn draws on Kristen's shoes with crayons (or something), and then cleaning that off becomes the assignment for the tinies. Its these really mundane things that might happen to her footwear in Kristen's everyday life that you could write about in those segments, then later the juxtaposition of that same footwear and its impact on the tinies. I felt this was a missed opportunity in this chapter, because there was no mention of those silver heels in those day to day life segments. Something like that would have made it more interesting, in my opinion.

Just some stuff to think about.

I do want to comment on the 180 degree shift in morality of Kristen in Ginny. In my first review I applauded the slow and gradual development of Kristen to get to this point, and how this is in my opinion preferable to the vast majority of stories where the giantess is cruel and evil right from the very start. But regardless of the slow development to get to this point, Kristen and Ginny are now there. This is both good and bad at the same time. When you responded to my first review you said it would take a lot of calamites before the population is reduced to a scary level, but I dunno. The like 15 minutes or so Kristen and Ginny spent in that room probably killed millions of people in that short space of time. And yes, we're talking about a nation of hundreds of millions. But they probably killed like 1% of the population in that short period of time and that's not an insignificant blow for such a space of time. It wouldn't have been so bad if Kristen correctly identified the right city the first time and only wiped out that one, but even then that's massive overkill for a couple assassins. And they are completely indifferent to all these deaths, which is the total opposite of where things started. Like I said, its a double edged sword. There's both good and bad things to say about it.

Its kinda weird, too, that you wrote Ginny being a Vegan, so she's against eating animals, but eating tiny humans (even on accident) doesn't seem to bother her in the slightest. Its a really strange contradiction. IIRC, this was before she even knew that the micros were people. Because she ate that piece of banana even though she knew it was covered with (what she thought were) "ants", but despite being "vegan" she still ate it anyway. Either way, it just seems to go against her character, whether its eating humans or even just (what she thinks are) bugs. Because actual vegans don't eat bugs, and they certainly wouldn't eat people either. I dunno... it just seems like an odd break in character in my opinion.

But anyway, even though Leslie's visit got Kristen to embrace her power and dominance (and I'm not saying this is a bad thing), it is possible to ease back on this a little, even if just temporarily. For example, when Kristen has her conversation with Justyna in the next chapter, you could have Justyna show her videos of the death and destruction that her actions caused, and maybe this causes her to have a twinge of guilt and remorse and she regains some of the humanity she had lost... even if just temporarily.

Reviewer: GiantessLover21 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 17 2023 11:18 PM Title: Chapter 18 - Sunday Funday

This chapter is really good as always i love the evolution between Kristen and the micro people, i love when the giantess become more and more confident in her own power. And the part with Ginny stinky feet is the cherry on top. Good job Panzer 

Author's Response:

Thank you!  Glad you loved the cherry on top.