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Reviewer: Sernos Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 12 2022 2:15 AM Title: Part I: For The Night Ahead

It just keeps on getting better! I really love the time you took to develop the different characters in chapter 3, with the one thing in common being how little they care for the tinies under their feet. It makes it feel like a believable, immersive world rather than just smut.

Incidentally, I would subscribe to a Patreon if it meant I get to see more updates to this story. Just a suggestion! :)



Author's Response:

I’m incredibly glad to hear you say that mate, as I was pretty concerned, during the writing process for this chapter, that I wasn’t giving enough fetish-content along with the character building! I was keen on trying to make the world seem somewhat grounded between all the more fantastical elements, and I’m glad that’s worked for you!

Well that’s very kind of you to say, and I may well consider it in the future. However, for now, I feel like I have a lot more to prove to people before pursuing such an avenue, just so I don’t seem like a one-note author, you know?

Anyway, I do hope to return back to Sarah/Grace/Annie soon, and I hope you enjoy some of what I’ve been working on in the meantime!

Reviewer: GiantessLover21 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 28 2022 12:37 AM Title: Part I: For The Night Ahead

The wait was worth it. Can't wait to see you're new project.  

Author's Response:

I really appreciate that mate, and I'm glad you think so!

Fingers crossed I can make the next stories worth it too, and I'll definitely have to come back to this story down the line, especially with some of the ideas I'm playing around with.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 20 2021 4:51 AM Title: Part I: For The Night Ahead

Sarah seems lovely.

Author's Response:

Oh she is! ...sort of...

I'd say to the average person, she's fairly lovely, if a little self-centred and dim from time to time, but on the whole, certainly nice to be around.

It's just that, if you're of the size and stature that could prove useful to her, things tend to get a bit more... unpleasant from there, as I'm sure you could tell.

And thank you for the review!!

Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: November 20 2021 4:14 AM Title: Part I: For The Night Ahead

Is this your first attempt at writing a story, or just your first posting of a story at this site?  I ask because your story is great.  Not an amateurish posting, but a really terrific posting.

If you continue writing in this style, I guarantee you will have quite the following.

Your story speaks for itself; but I do have one criticism.  Write for your audience.  We all know a word and its meaning that others do not.  When you use a word like "pandiculate" that readers have to look up, it stops the story flow.  Just write "a wakening stretch", "muscle relaxation", or something along those lines.  We are not all rocket scientists; but even a rocket scientist may not know what a "thumper keg" is.  {e.g. Did you ever read "Jaws"?  Peter Benchley wrote that Ellen Brody wore a "diaphanous" attire (or some clothing like that???) rather than a "see through nighty"}  Remember KISS:  Keep It Simple Stupid.

Write as you see fit, but remember your audience, and big words are less impressive than communicating your point.

BTW, how the heck did you post this story so that readers could not increase the text size?  The text is so small one has to get close to the screen in order to read it.  The "-Text Size+" function has no affect.

Other than that, very well done.  Actually, extremely well done.  BRAVO!

Author's Response:

So it's the first full length story I've ever written on a public platform, besides a few interactive chapters on writing.com, but I've written a fair bit over the years, however never in a capacity that was worth publishing or that even warranted finishing. Therefore, the goal with this, from the start, was to post it, so that sort of spurred me on to completion.

I certainly appreciate that! Can't say I went into this seeking any kind of following explicitly, but I'm always game for community building if people enjoy what I write!

That's a fair criticism, man, and I'd be lying if I said I've not had that levelled at me in person a few times too, simply by nature of the way I talk haha. I understand your concern, and do appreciate that, however I also think that comes down to a difference in writing philosophy more than anything else. For the most part, I'm with you, but I'm also a bit of a fan of trying to challenge the reader's own vocabulary, at least in some small way, and that's been quite important for my own written development over the years. Most of the time, it's vital to keep thinks clear to the broadest audience, even if you're using more complex grammar or framing, as long as the words themselves are obvious, but now and then I think it's good to throw in something foreign to the reader's knowledge. Sure it might mean someone has to spend a few moments searching it up, but if that word then sticks with them and further expands the weight that idea presents, it can make for a much more memorable reading experience!

But anyway, no one wants to read an essay on the philosophy of writing from me lol, so I'll leave that there. I guess I'm somewhat with HelplessChime on this point, but I definitely get where you're coming from for the most part, mate.

I've gotta be honest, I had no idea I'd even managed that until you mentioned it?! I guess it could've been due to the typeface I'd used when uploading, however I'm not really sure why that would make a difference. I've tried to increase it on my end in the meantime, so hopefully that helps, but I'll try and see what the issue is.

And thank you!! I really do appreciate all the feedback, praise and critique alike! I must say, I've been a fan of your stuff in the past, especially some of the stuff in Rachelle's Sweat Pads, so it's quite surreal to hear such kind words from you!


Reviewer: GiantessLover21 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 19 2021 11:34 PM Title: Part I: For The Night Ahead

Good story hope to see you continue.  

Author's Response:

Appreciate it, man! And I'm already drafting a few possible continuations, so here's hoping!

Reviewer: el_rooto Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 19 2021 4:31 PM Title: Part I: For The Night Ahead

It's way better than just "any good", and I'm not cutting you any slack because it's your 1st or anything like that.

But I'm kinda partial to giantesses "caring" about their tinies, so take my good impression with a grain of salt until more people chime in :)



Author's Response:

You're far too kind, mate, and I'm glad to hear you think so!

Technically speaking, I've been writing stuff like this for the better part of a decade, but haven't ever intentionally developed something worth posting till now - besides a few throwaway interactive story chapters here and there.

I did want to try and strike a balance with Sarah, as I think, at the moment anyway, there's an overabundance of cruel giantesses who are just that way for the sake of it, so my intention was to make her a bit more of a utilitarian, I suppose. She owns the tinies and keeps them there against their will, which isn't exactly kind, but at the same time, she doesn't subject them to grim fates just to mess with them and does enjoy having them around, so it's more that she finds them useful to her, and that just so happens to be pretty unpleasant most of the time.

Anyway, I'll quit rambling now, and once again, I'm really pleased you got a kick out of it!

Reviewer: GhostWriter44 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 19 2021 3:40 PM Title: Part I: For The Night Ahead

Absolutely loved this! I do wish we got to know a little bit about the servants and who they were before they got shrunk but that’s not much of a complaint at all. Love your writing style so much. Would love to see more from you but I definitely understand wanting to just go back to lurking lolol



Author's Response:

I'm so glad to hear that!

Yeah, I get what you mean. If I'd intended this to be a longer story or possibly a series, then I'd have certainly worked in a bit more individual characterisation and backstory for the tinies, but given its nature as a one-shot, I didn't want to drag the thing to a halt for that, yanno.

And you've got no idea of relieved I am to hear that lol. I've always struggled with over-describing the hell out of stories and as a result the pace just nosedives, so it was sort of a goal with this to balance the plot with enough description to keep things interesting!

I think, given this has already gotten a pretty decent reaction, there's a good chance I'll look at doing a bit more in the future. Not sure if it'll involve Sarah, or maybe someone else entirely, but I suppose we'll see ;)

Reviewer: liliannnwritesstuff Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 19 2021 2:24 PM Title: Part I: For The Night Ahead

great story, I love it!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much!

I’m really glad you did, and I sincerely appreciate the five stars!

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