Reviews For Smalloween
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Reviewer: lorange Signed [Report This]
Date: December 29 2021 4:28 PM Title: Part 4

Oh wow, 3 new chapters all at once was a very welcome surprise.

Good setup/anticipation in this one (and technically the chapters before it). Typically in stories like this, characters that get squished don't last longer than the chapter they're introduced. That's fine, but it's nice having some variety to keep the tension up, as you never know who's gonna make it out unscathed.

Unfortunately I don't have any suggestions for improvements for these last chapters. They're all paced well and paint good mental pictures. I think the only thing that stood out was the repeated use of "maracas" to describe something shaking or being tossed about. Some more in-depth similes could help describe the scene with greater impact to the reader. You could describe the same scene with the simile "-like a shred of paper in a hurricane", or a simpler one, "-like a jello in an earthquake". Obviously these aren't hard and fast rules, they're just something to keep in the back of your mind when editing.

Thanks for the new chapters.

Reviewer: teradonk Signed [Report This]
Date: November 23 2021 8:35 PM Title: Part 3

Love this story, as I do all of yours. Ellen Payne, hell yeah! You do so well creating these extra tall, mature, voluptuous women who become giantess terrors, whether aware or not. The size difference is always infused with detail in your stories, combined with the violence and smut (especially butt smut for me), makes the stories especially erotic and memorable. I hope you don't let the Patreon banning affect you too much or long, because it's ridiculous. I've been reading these types of stories for a long time, and yours are indeed distinct and special. I greatly anticipate each new chapter from you. Cheers!

Reviewer: lorange Signed [Report This]
Date: November 20 2021 2:37 PM Title: Part 3

Short, simple, effective, nice.

Also with the ban from Patreon, have you considered an alternative, like subscribestar? I'm pretty sure they're less restrictive than Patreon when it comes to smut. Patreon seems to ban things at random, as they don't really apply their rules evenly.

Reviewer: lorange Signed [Report This]
Date: November 15 2021 7:49 PM Title: Part 2

Awesome chapter. Although there were a couple points where I found it a little difficult to discern who was talking. Good nonetheless, and I'm excited to see where this goes. Also I hope you get your Patreon back so you can keep earning some stuff on the side with your writing.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the support, I'll keep it in mind to make who's talking clear :)

Reviewer: boons123 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 02 2021 8:56 PM Title: Part 1

Excellent so far, looking forward to the next few parts.

Reviewer: Iunno Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 01 2021 4:31 PM Title: Part 1

Love it so far. I think you may be the only writer that I enjoy closed toe shoe crush from lol. You still accepting commissions?

Author's Response:

Thank you for the support :) Unfortunately I'm taking a bit of a break from writing at the moment. The ban from Patreon hit kinda hard. I'm finishing the Smalloween series and then I'll see if I have the inspiration to keep writing. I'll let you know when/if I'm taking commissions again :)

Reviewer: lorange Signed [Report This]
Date: November 01 2021 2:35 AM Title: Part 1

Promising start! I've always enjoyed your little holiday novelettes, all of them have been great so far.

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