Reviewer: Panzerhunter Signed [Report This]
Date: June 15 2021 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 17: Wet New World

How selfish Alurel is. Its a wonder no one questioned her behavior until it was too late. Mysterious disappearances, coincidences, "slips of the tongue" that showed contempt for those smaller than herself. Willful negligence on the part of her peers.

Poor Clamdi. Rest in pieces in peace. I love how matter of fact Alurel is about killing. She doesn't want you someplace? ATE. You're assigned to partner with her? ATE. You just helped her? ATE. Friends for years, but she needs a new bra, and your shell is nice, but no one notices that its yours? ATE!!!!!!!!! Super nice fatherly figure concerned about all the beings in his domain? Back-stabbed into OBLIVION!!!!!!

This is how you do evil. They're evil because they're evil.

There was an author on here who wrote a Cinderella themed story. He took down all his stories a while ago, but you would have loved it, I'd bet.

Also, by what magics do you write all these stories so fast?! I haven't even gotten to read all of the steampunk one yet.

Author's Response:

Ha good points! I think Alurel just seemed naturally sweet at times, which meant she got the benefit of the doubt. I think, perhaps, her being so evil at points helped her situation since a lot of what she did would just be unthinkable. If it's unthinkable, then who would suspect it, right?

That's part of what I was going for with her maybe. I'm happy you seemed to like the character though!

I feel as though it's possible I heard of that Cinderella story? In any case, I don't like to deal with family-relations content (even step-family), so I'm not sure I would pursue writing a spin-off of that fairy tale.

I'm happy people think I write fast. I hope I write at least decently as well haha. I wrote an outline for this story, which perhaps helped in writing it at the speed I did.

Thanks again for sharing your thoughts!

Reviewer: geeman Signed [Report This]
Date: June 15 2021 2:55 AM Title: Chapter 17: Wet New World

I'm surprised how much I enjoyed this.

At first I thought she Alurel was gonna be actually kind but maybe she eats a few bad humans her and there because we need a reason for justified vore its a fetish story lol...

But nope! The turning point for me was when she brutally killed and ate her friend JUST to get a new bra. I was WHOA okay. And she never went like "edgy" evil, like how most people write evil characters who act kind where like a switch flips and it was all a ruse. No, she still acts the same as when I thought she was a good person but she's clearly not good.

In fact she's REALLY evil, at the end she eats sacrificed people just because, no need for it. But the way she's written its almost like she like nice evil. Like she'll eat you and churn you to mush but she'll delicately do it and with a sweet smile on her face.

Author's Response:

I'm happy to hear that's how you saw the character, since 'sweet but evil' was what I was going for. I wanted to avoid 'switch-flipping' as much, because I felt as though I did that a little bit in one or a few of my past stories. One easy way to do that is just starting with a character who's already kind of evil, right?

Thank you for sharing your thoughts!