I am a bit ticked that you categorically wrote "Pokémon" wrong, but the quality of the story alleviates that gripe quickly.

"[...], stunned ato haveg received so much."

"[...],Victor was at a loss for words on." But not enough of a loss to have a "on" too much. ;)

I am pleasently surprised that you didn't go with the "Angry Scottish Girl" Persona that the Internet applied to Gloria. Surprisingly, I just learned that the male player character is called Victor, I've nerver even thought about what his name is. After seeing his hat for the first time, he was completely irrelevant for me.

Now I am wondering how a Woman/Girl would act if she was short and cute and enjoying being like this and then gets hit by a Dynamax Anomaly...