Reviewer: teradonk Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01 2023 5:22 PM Title: The End.

well, that's too bad. This story is great and you're a gifted writer. that skill will find a use for you or purpose.
regarding the rebirth: anyone's journey of faith is their business and they have a right to that. that said, I personally think the very specific, narrow channels of faith demanded by certain religions are ridiculous and manipulative and baloney. that one in particular demands one to cauterize one's natural humanity in service to a legion of voices it incorrectly identifies as Jesus as Nazareth. At least in Western fundamentalism, he's become nothing but a mascot. no one pays attention to what he says; rather, they salivate after the words that condemn ourselves and others.
I wish you well. Unfortunately, this desire that you have, this lust and fetish, will not be seared away by any adherence to a faith, only hidden as something to be ashamed of, when there should be no shame at all.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: April 30 2023 7:55 AM Title: The End.

While I am sad that you won’t be finishing the story, I am grateful that you posted your story ideas and notes on what you planned on doing. It was fun to read and it was cool to connect the dots on how it all happens. 

I really want to know more details about Liam wanting to die by getting swallowed. I was hoping that Mrs. Johnson gets to play with him for a night before that happens and I guess that isn’t happening. 

Also, it’s sad that we didn’t get much info with Rachel W. She seems like the perfect giantess for me despite having very little detail about her. She doesn’t want to kill a tiny, but isn’t afraid to play with them. I like that. I’m glad she ended up with Gaitlin. 

Well, it was fun while it lasted. The whole concept was amazing and I reread so many chapters while I was waiting. The locker room scene will always be one of my all-time favorite giantess scenes. It was thrilling, intense, and hot! 

That midterm section also sounds amazing and I wish we could see that unfold. Well, the content you produced is awesome and if you ever decided to embrace giantess content along with your life, then I would be glad to see you continue. If not, farewell and thank you for the great story! 

Reviewer: singe Signed [Report This]
Date: April 29 2023 3:48 AM Title: Chapter 1: Research Trip

Well, that's a huge letdown.

I really enjoyed this story when it was being updated. The premise of a group of kids learning about health and the body through interacting with their giant teacher was an A+ premise, and the early chapters which were just that were pretty good. Unfortunately it was sorely lacking when it came to the student characters.They were all shallow and interchangeable. The main problem is that they all had basically the same attitude when it came to giant girls, so when the point is seeing their interactions with said giant girls, they were all basically the same. Some gender variety would've gone a long way. I get that the plot requires them mostly be boys, but there still could have been some girls who inadvertently got involved, and they would've stood out and help the others stand out, and really opened up the story as far as what could be done with the characters. Still, they worked well enough as objects to be acted upon, and that really is enough when that's the whole point of the story.

The story really picked up with the first and what turned out to be only major arc, with them sneaking into the girls' locker room and the aftermath of that. It was great seeing how people treated them when they were considered disposable, and watching them realize that, and how in over their heads they were was fun and exciting, as was the danger and stakes. The weak characters start to become a real problem in this arc, as now that they've been separated, knowing who each of them are helps keep track of them, and when they're all basically the same, that's hard to do. I found myself asking "which one is this?", "how many were there originally?", and "didn't that one die?" way too often.

I wish the arc didn't resolve so neatly. Having them all live and be fine undercut the danger, as did returning to the status quo. It's easy to say that in hindsight, it should've ended after that arc, but even at the time, resetting everything seemed like a bad idea. I can't say I was enjoying the chapters that came after that arc nearly as much, but who knows, maybe it would've picked up and have been even better. Still, I do wish it had continued.

I'm torn on whether the final chapter is better than if it simply had never ended and we never got any sort of closure at all. From my limited perspective, I was predicting an impending burn-out and hiatus. The chapters were too long and too regular to be continued indefinitely, especially when it was seemingly the only piece the writer was working on, a recipe for writer's block and burn-out. Plus, the story teaser, chapter 18 was a really bad sign, since research shows that announcing your goal before you're done hurts your chances of completing them, so I wasn't surprised at all when updates stopped.

Chances were low for a continuation, but with this update, there's no longer any hope. Blaming it on being "born again" or whatever, is weird and not thoroughly convincing. It sounds like an excuse, considering apparently writing more would be sinful, but releasing more wouldn't? I imagine this actually happens pretty commonly, though not in such a dramatic fashion, where people move on and become ashamed or embarrassed by their old work, and that's why some writers delete all of their stories, but if that was the case here, I'd expect the story to be deleted, not updated with the writer's manuscript, like they're the Tolkien Estate publishing The Silmarillion posthumously. The main problem is that the formatting is so poor that it's hard to read, and that it's so clearly unfinished that I find it hard to imagine anyone would be satisfied with it.

Personally, I think I'd rather not have had the final chapter. It's poorly written and formatted. It's weird, self indulgent, self righteous, and preachy. The whole thing reeks of ego, and I'll never be able to fully separate that from the rest of the story.

Reviewer: brett533 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 25 2022 11:54 AM Title: Chapter 1: Research Trip

Have a nice week. Hope to see new chapter coming! No rush

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Date: April 04 2022 7:08 PM Title: Chapter 15, Part 2

Welcome back so excited for where this will go!

Reviewer: TheZiku6000 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 29 2022 5:35 PM Title: Chapter 15, Week 7: Teacher's Pets

Hello again! :)

I must say, this is quite a cliffhanger. I wonder what will happen to Noah, but I'm sure he will stay alive, since one of the future chapters' title suggests his involvement in some kind of competition (also, there's a ladder inisde the toilet for him to climb back up, which initially hadn't caught my attention and that's why I'm reposting this review).

As for the entirety of this chapter, I guess this counts as an interesting field trip, with Troy as a tour guide. I wonder if his role ends in this part of a story, or if we encounter him again.

Speaking of Troy, I'd like to ask something about legal issues in this universe, and this is a very specific question I'd be happy to get an answer for (unless this information will become very important for the story in later parts, to the point that it serves as a device to present a HUGE plot twist; if so, I will wait): if somebody is shrunk for their claims while in theory being imprisoned for, for example, two years, and they're lucky enough to meet someone who would be happy to get them grown back, do they have to wait these two years or can they be grown back right away? This picked my interest and I'd be very grateful for an answer.

I'm also looking forward to development of some romantic relationships. I think it's fairly obvious that Noah was asking in a roundabout way about Alexis, and, although less obvious, Ms. Johnson's answer sounded as if she was remembering her past experiences while talking and this tells us more about her as a character, so this conversation kind of kills two birds with one stone. At least, I think so.

Another matter is with Brayden and Candice of course. If someone from the main cast were to be removed from the equation, I think a scenario with these two characters would be the most fitting.

Thank you for another amazing chapter! Looking forward to reading the next one!

Have a nice week (or more)! :)

Author's Response:

Hehe, Noah is certainly in a rather precarious situation right now isn’t he. That is the rather unfortunate part of his character though… he’s difficult to harm. We’re still early enough in the story that he’ll probably find a way back to safety, but his luck may eventually run out. We’ll have to wait and see! As for supernatural stuff, the most supernatural I think we’ll go is the introduction of the shrinking tech haha. I’ve always enjoyed stories that try to keep things realistic even when it’s not exactly possible to be realistic :) 

That is a very interesting question. I’ll have to put some thought into that since I’m guilty in saying that I’ve never actually considered that before. I can share my initial thoughts though… So I’ve more or less considered the act of shrinking a guilty person as being a binary thing. Either you’re sentenced to shrinking or you’re not. Which may sound cruel because that’s essentially a death sentence, and in a strong way it is. But we’re sort of building up this world in which a high population is less than desirable. So it’s actually a good thing in the eyes of those in charge that shrinking is binary because it’s keeping the population at bay. Which sort of leads into a much deeper plot of “what if the government forced the population to stay below a certain cap so that resources were plentiful for all and the natural world was allowed to recover”. That plot is ultimately buried deep below the surface, but how far will we go with that idea in this story? That I’m not sure of yet. But one way or another, I want to get “that” story down in words someday. This is almost like a practice story for that one. So to answer your question, my instinct tells me that once you’re shrunk, you’re shrunk. Your punishment has been served and it’s up to the world if you’re allowed to be regrown (and there are only so many who can do that). But regrowing is rare given the reputation that disposables have (they’re typically very bad people). Good question!

I completely agree that we need to work on developing some romantic relationships. It’s probably what I struggle with the most with writing because love is such a deeply complex thing. It’s actually incredibly difficult to create that natural bond between characters. I’ve read too many books that basically say, “and they fell in love”. But that’s not how love is supposed to be. It’s a deeply personal connection that two characters need to have. It needs to be shown, not forced and told. So through the next 40 or so chapters that’s something I want to try and explore between a few of the characters. But you’re definitely correct in picking out Ms. Johnson’s past in her speech. She’s definitely still got a lot going on that she’s working on figuring out.

Reviewer: TheZiku6000 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 27 2022 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 14, Part 2

Hello again! :)

That was quite thrilling, especially the part with Myles. Even though, logically speaking, this couldn't have been the case, I thought almost the entire time that his life will end. There's still some time for that to happen, but I figure the most risky situation for him is over now.

I figure that the girls will be shrunk, too. If that happens, I wonder what will happen to Candice. If she will still be stuck in place where she was when she last appeared, then she may be effectively shrunk down to the microscopic size. I don't think this will happen, but the thought is quite interesting. However, even I that won't happen, another interesting idea could be applied, like limiter that doesn't allow to shrink a person when they already have a shrunk person on them. That might quite an intersting loophole in this world's shrinking system. Using disposable in order not to become one yourself. I know it probably cannot be implemented in this story, but I hope you'll think about it just a little.

Moving on to the next topic, I'd like to speak about the state of the world in your story. When I watched videos of a certain (Polish) youtuber, he made a joke of a sentence that "There are 7 million people in the world". I'm mentioning this because I want to ask whether the world in this story is reduced to such a state or maybe not as severe. I'll seriously need an answer to this question.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Have a nice week (or two, depending when you'll upload the next chapter)! :)

Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed it! The Myles idea actually didn’t even make it into the first few rounds of planning but it turned out to be a pretty exciting idea once the chapter started to come together. So definitely glad it found its way in. I’m also glad to hear that we’re at the point where there’s a bit of fear around Ms. Johnson and some uncertainty around tiny people. A little suspense is never a bad thing. But I do think that’s how the boys would feel around her. Although their teacher, she’s still many times bigger and stronger and heavier than they are. So naturally there would be some nerves in there. And they’ve only actually known her for a few weeks.

Your question of whether or not Ms. Johnson will shrink the girls will definitely be confirmed in the next chapter (probably in part 2 or 3). We won’t get to know exactly what Ms. Johnson puts them through. We’ll just get a few hints here and there that should let you piece together the puzzle. Reasoning behind that is I’d like to save a surprise for the next chapter and the chapter after that.

That’s actually a very interesting point… if you shrunk someone with a shrunken person already on them, what happens to the shrunken person? To be honest, this is the first time I’ve ever thought of that question for this story. Completely overlooked it. Cause we’ve established so far that everyone shrinks to roughly 1-2 inches. I’ll put some thought to it, though I don’t think we’ll see it have an effect on the story. Or maybe it will and we can find a clever spot for it. 

Population is a very good question because it’s a fundamental aspect of the story world and something that differs dramatically from our current world. Honestly, I haven’t done enough research to say with certainty what the exact world population is. I’m assuming that at this point we would need a minimum number of people to actually keep the world from disintegrating (gotta keep those power plants from blowing up for example). But I definitely picture the population having decreased Significantly during the virus 10 years ago. I’ve had that mental image since the start. A billion or so is sort of what I originally had in mind (again, not sure what exactly would be a sustainable number). And as I’m writing this, I’m also realizing that 10 years is probably a pretty rapid bounce-back from something that devastating (but gotta keep Ms. Johnson’s age somewhat realistic). So perhaps we could argue that the future technology has enabled us to climb out of something like that sooner than otherwise would’ve been possible. I definitely have more behind the question of “what fueled this story” but it’s so complex that I’m currently struggling to put it into words. 

Reviewer: brett533 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 26 2022 12:07 PM Title: Chapter 14, Part 2

Can't wait for more! glad your back!Hope tonight is steamy for the boys

Author's Response:

I’d say the boys are about to join in on a pretty wild night lol. It’ll be a similar but somewhat different type of danger compared to the changeroom chapter. 

Reviewer: TheZiku6000 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 15 2022 1:19 PM Title: Chapter 14, Part 1: Detention

Hello again! :) 

So, we get to know a difference between disposable and personal tiny. Being "personal tiny" is a rise in status one gets by chance, so IF they get this rise in status, they must work VERY HARD to keep it.

When I think about it, I cannot help but go back to question what kind of person would be safer to be around for tiny. On my list of "safe bets" are the elders and single men, provided that they're not in a hurry to get into relationship. However, I would like to add members of clergy living in celibate to that list, especially men.

I'm also kind of curious whether politics in the USA are significantly different than in real life or not. After all, prison labor is a thing there. Prisosers are working in many areas, like building highways or working in call senters for very little sums of money, and in some states, even for free. It's a huge market with a lot of profit to make. I may be wrong, but I figured that if we intoduce shrinking people into this, the only real profit it would make is a possibility to cut down on expenses for maintenance of prison buildings, since tiny people need less space. In that kind of situation, I think it's safe to assume that they would only be shrunk for their time in cells and transports. That would also require a lot of supervisors, like more obedient prisoners who are very strong at the same time. And many, MANY shrinking devices to keep the convicts in check, which would be quite an investment in itself. So, in the end, they might end up just sticking to the old ways if finances prove to be too much of a problem, because I highly doubt they would give up on prison labor in this kind of circumstances.

In conclusion, unless this universe presents some very significant changes when it comes to politics of the US, the scenatio described above would be the one that makes most sense. I'm kinda curious about your take on that.

Next, I'd like to say something about the subject of what kind of person wouldn't fare well as a personal tiny. My best bet would be a person who's serious about religious stuff when it comes to world's big religions. Also, a person with strong sense of justice combined with some kind of mental disorder.

If I had to mentioned who would be best qualified, I'd say submissive pervert. They would be most likely to obey every order.

Looking forward to the next part of this chapter!

Have a nice week! :)

Author's Response:

These are all very good comments and luckily I think I’ve thought about and have answers to everything. Some of which are only working answers though considering we’re apparently designing a pretty complex world. 

So I consider being a personal tiny a very very good thing. I picture it as being almost equivalent to marriage. On a scale of 1 to 10 where 1 is your enemy, 5 is a really good friend, and 10 is lifelong partner in marriage, being a personal tiny is an 8 or 9. It’s someone you love very much and would do anything for. Think of your most favourite pet in the whole world. You would do practically anything for it right? Within reason of course (and that’s the gap to marriage). So I would say that “work” is an interesting word because if you love someone to the point of wanting to marry them, of course you need to continue to “work” on your relationship, but it shouldn’t feel like work. It should feel like something that you just naturally want to do. So to answer your other comment, I would maybe suggest that a veterinarian or someone who studies and cherishes life would be a worthy candidate. However, if you form a deep bond with someone, you should feel entirely safe in their presence as well. You don’t marry someone with the intention of stabbing them in the back (unless you’re crazy lol). Now I would also say there are people who abuse their power over their tiny person, thinking they deserve more. But that’s just like abusive partners in our real world.

So disposables… These are probably the most interesting characters in the world because their backstory is so complex. Because there are so many interesting ethical and legal decisions behind them, the story behind these people will probably be forever developing. Financially, I picture (like you said) a whole bunch of savings in land, labour, and goods to house them compared to housing real life prisoners. But I also picture there being two other major incentives. One being an arguably safer world because they can’t escape (they’re teeny tiny). But another is that they sell for a boatload of money. I briefly mentioned in the story (Chapter 1 or maybe in A Night With Ms. Johnson… can’t remember) that celebs and the rich buy up these tiny disposables like crazy just because they’re incredibly fun to use. They basically turn into slaves. The ones who are masterful in bed or in the kitchen or in school are highly sought after. And the ones who aren’t can still serve some rather interesting purposes. 

Politics wise, we’re definitely building towards a very different world that was sparked by a virus that was far more lethal than the one we’re currently facing. It sort of gave this world a fresh start. My goal with the story has sort of turned from “let’s just write a fun story” to “let’s write a fun story and see if we can’t present some interesting thinking points too”. I’ve been chatting about the story end and the world with one of my peer reviewers a fair bit and I think I’ve got a pretty interesting world in mind. Definitely different than ours… but similar in a lot of ways too. Think “more extreme” in certain aspects. By the end of the story, I’m hoping to create a bit of a “what if” scenario that gets you thinking. Sort of, “what if the world did more of…” I’m still working on the details so I can’t really get too far into it yet, but I’ll leave you with the word “optimize”.

Submissive pervert is probably the real winner in all of this lol. I think most people would probably cherish one of those… I’d say the most dangerous person to be around as a tiny person is anyone horny haha. Whether it be a male or female, I don’t like the tiny’s chances unless that person has a serious reason not to harm them. After all, we’ve already seen what happens when a horny Ms. Johnson gets a hold of a group of disposables she has no connection to…

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: February 15 2022 11:07 AM Title: Chapter 14, Part 1: Detention

Happy Valentine’s Day to you too! 

And I’m glad we got another update! Detention time. Giantess detention is usually when things get spicy and so far, it seems like the fun is just getting started! 

There’s 2 things that made me excited this chapter. First was when Mrs. Johnson was circling the chairs where the students sat in.

Part of me thought maybe she would sit in one of the chairs, but a student would be between her legs on the chair and he would hope she doesn’t close her legs on him. Lol. Who knows, maybe one of the guys could share a story like that since they are grouped together now. 

Second is the announcement for the girls and Mrs. Hulme to join the same classroom. If this is one big reunion, I’m so looking forward to it! Is Mrs. Johnson going to pair up the boys to the women?

So there’s 7 girls from the announcement, then add Mrs. Hulme and then Mrs. Johnson herself. That’s 9 women and there’s 5 boys in the classroom. Now we need 1 more woman. Ah. Alexis. Perfect. Maybe each boy gets shared between 2 women. Lol, a little too much, right? Sounds too crazy to be true. However, it does give me some ideas.

Imagine Mrs. Hulme reuniting with Brayden again. Or Calvin with Allison. That would be kinda funny. 

I’m really interested in this whole “don’t be a disposable, be a personal tiny man”. Being a personal tiny sex toy also seems pretty close to what Mrs. Johnson is implying so part of me wonders if that’s in store for one of these guys, haha. 

The thong exercise felt a bit random, but I guess it shows how weak they are compared to Mrs. Johnson’s muscular disposables. 

Also, the teeth task right now seems kinda random too. I think Mrs. Johnson is stalling or something. There’s gotta be a catch. Maybe some mouth play is coming up. Idk, but I have a feeling that Mrs. Johnson’s tongue is going to have some fun. 

Well, I can’t wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

I love how random keeps popping up in this review lol. It about sums it up too. To be honest, the actual tasks the boys are faced with don’t really have a lot of meaning. They’re really just meant to be fun, interesting things to break up the story. Ideas that when you really stop to think about and ask the question, “what if I were in their tiny shoes” you’d probably say “that would be wild”. To me, the idea of even just being tasked with having to try to remove your teacher’s thong at only an inch or two tall is quite the thought. A simple thing, but something that you would never get the chance to do in real life. I picture Ms. Johnson beating home the idea of “being a disposable equals a sure, probably cruel death. But being a person tiny man probably equals a life of purpose and love” with this detention. Hinting that had the boys not been discovered, they probably would’ve remained disposables and been wiped out. Ms. Johnson ultimately wants to build men worthy of being personals and not disposables. 

Although a very fun idea, it may come as a bit of a disappointment that Ms. Johnson vs. the girls won’t be directly shown. I do have a few reasons for it… First being, after what Ms. Johnson is about to do to the girls, the girls will probably be pretty edgy. Second being the story is meant to focus more so on the boys. Third being, a meeting between the boys and the girls will eventually go down, but on an equal playing field. And actually, as I’m writing this, there’s sort of a fourth. Although Ms. Johnson is teaching the boys everything they need to know about women, she’s also building up the power that women hold in the world. So if she shows the boys what she does to punish the girls, it kind of takes away a bit of that. The boys will get to see some of the aftermath though.

I do have another Brayden/Mrs. Hulme interaction planned, though it may or may not be directly between them… perhaps through someone Mrs. Hulme values. Mrs. Hulme still has quite a few interesting moments left in the story.

It’s going to be very interesting to see how well I can pull everything together by the end of the story lol. It’s a personal pet peeve to read a story and then have unanswered questions besides just the theme questions designed by the author. Same goes for TV shows. So by the end I’m hoping to have everything pretty well wrapped up. I like to think I know how I’m going to do that :) I’ve got a running list of questions to answer but I suspect I’m going to need to go back through our review discussions someday and pick out everything that’s still outstanding. It’s a work in progress and you’re all my guinea pigs lol.