Date: January 12 2021 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 36: Embed
Wait, how did I miss the obvious Computing-references that "Desync", "Overflow" & "Embed" were until now?
Author's Response:
Ha, it is no worries! As a fun fact I briefly considered every chapter having a technology-themed name, but decided against it. It'd probably be a hassle to try and come up with a thematic name for each chapter like that. It could be possible though!
Thanks for sharing your thoughts!
Date: January 12 2021 7:58 PM Title: Chapter 34: Desync
Her massive naked body crashed to the ground "to lay on her front with legs kicking in the air behind her."
This sentence had quite the impact on me. As that's the exact posture I had when reading it. Granted, with a mattress beneath me and I require male pronouns, but still very close.
Also I love giantesses tormenting tinies with their natural gas, both released through the front and back door of their gastric tract. ^^
I am surprised that Delta is content with just the strike team as physical slaves though. One would think she would get at least a hundred people from the neighborhood to tend to her on principle.
Date: December 29 2020 9:21 AM Title: Chapter 33: Planning
" Long ago people used to roast bugs called ‘ants’ under magnifying glasses. "
So there aren't any ants anymore(in the real world or at least the part that wasn't "misstepped" out of existence, not in paradise of course)? That's kinda hard to believe.
So it took Delta four years to realize that her omnipotence is on lend time. I wouldn't have factored in that the Sun will eventually roast earth (the latest as soon as our lovely star becomes a Red Giant), but would've thought a multitude of hardware-level failures in the Computer Farms running Paradise would be the undoing of Delta's Reign.
Oh. I guess I mistunderstood the story chapters ago. I thought Delta already HAD full and all-access to the Computer Farms as she redirected any transportation ressources to Paradise.
Whenever the great misstep is mentioned I wonder how the foreign people that just happened to be in the USA as it happened felt - and how they reacted. It probably wasn't favorable.
Delta will go back to a body neglected for four years? Given my own experience with the lack of moving on your own - due to a rather severe leg injury - it probably will be an uphill battle to even move.
Author's Response:
Thanks for sharing your thoughts!
Delta didn't have full access to all the Computer Farm resources at that time. However, since the farms are something of a distributed computing system, Paradise could take free computational resources to meet its needs. Since everyone was forcibly pulled into Paradise, there was no need to run the transportation systems. Those resources freed up and were directed to Paradise to meet the simulation's demands.
At the point in the story you mention, Delta's body was only immobile for hours, not years in the real world. This is due to how time dilation in Paradise worked. Years passed in Paradise was only hours passed out in the real world then.
I hope that makes sense!
Date: December 29 2020 8:32 AM Title: Chapter 32: Worship
"Two more years had passed."
"Real" years or years within paradise? The latter is way worse after all.
I wonder if there are at this point people who don't even care anymore.
So their "Escape" from Delta isn't Insanity, but Apathy.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the question. Years within Paradise was what was meant there.
Date: December 17 2020 8:01 AM Title: Chapter 31: Trolled
I could say: "I knew it!" But that wouldn't be accurate. First, I also didn't catch the hints as the Glasses of the therapist or the fact that Delta reads all minds casually all the time or the fact that she was uploaded into every (active) handclip in existence. The latter one I completely forgot unlike the othre two which I could've catched.
But I just knew right away that Frank's Freedom had to be fake. A BETA Shut-down button? That Delta overlooked when rewriting Paradise's Code? Way too convenient. Besides it (if it existed at all) had most likely have been some kind of Bullshit Series of Actions that nobody could figure out by themselves. (The Clocktime Reset Function of Pokémon Crystal is the first thing that comes to my mind there.)
I however didn't expect the resistance members to be fakes though. I thought the cruel joke was that Delta put together rebellious minds to break them even harder with an extra bit of gruesomeness. Sure, the resistance members in the fake freedom breakdown were obvious fakes but I didn't surmise they were before. It also surprised me that Delta played the "You are the Hero!"-Act to everyone. I thought Frank was another "sorta special slave" like Bruce had been. I geuss Delta is above giving individual people special attention by now.
Unless it's herself of course.
Author's Response:
Thank you for sharing what helped you figure it out and what didn't with regards to the "twist" here. I was curious what style of "clues" would tip people off more from a reader's perspective: noting the mechanics of her power/the-world, or the "contrived"/trope-y nature of the "shutdown" scenario itself.
Part of the reason the resistance members themselves were fake was for Delta to really sink in the level of hold she had on people's minds at that point. Another reason is that, well, inside the story's world not everyone might even have 2 work buddies. Some people in the story's world made digital items in Paradise, which could perhaps be a relatively solo job. Others just might not be the type to make friends at work. Who knows?
You are correct in that Delta didn't seem to want to spend too much attention on any person in particular. In that case, having a somewhat common "mold" for her "scenarios" helped with that.
Anyways I'm happy you enjoying the story thus far!
Date: December 17 2020 6:00 AM Title: Chapter 27: Scenarios
Frankly I want to try something like the Fantasy MMO from the first third of the chapter.
And if I am allowed to choose a race (and not just a class) I will go with Fairy. (To be as small as possible. ^^)
Author's Response:
Ha, I'm happy you seemed to enjoy that chapter.
Size in MMOs, other RPGs, and in game contexts in general is interesting to me as a theme/trope/whatever. It's something I might explore later in another story, but we'll see!
Date: December 09 2020 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 26: Tournament Finale
Who would've thought that Delta knew Fall Guys? Wasn't that a little before her time? :D
Jokes aside, interesting set of chapters, except Delta's cruelty, it was quite the departure from the story so far, (granted we had the Make/Break-Landia chapters) but if you've the luxury of an omnipotent main character you can do anything you want of course.
With just minimal rework this three chapters could work as a standalone story called "Fall and Die,Guys", which proves that you did the concept well.
Author's Response:
Ha, yeah I wanted a sort of obstacle course challenge bit at a point for the story. I'm happy you liked the concept!
Also yes, you kind of get the idea of her luxury: she holds the power and is doing what she pleases.
Thanks for continuing to read by the way. I'm pleased you seem to be enjoying things thus far
[Report This]Date: December 07 2020 11:28 PM Title: Chapter 1: Gray Skies
A real gem on this site consisting of mostly pebbles.
Author's Response:
I'm happy you enjoyed the story! I will say I've certainly read a lot of good stories from other authors on this site though. In any case, thank you for reading!
[Report This]Date: December 07 2020 1:29 PM Title: Chapter 1: Gray Skies
This might be my favorite story of all time here. I love it when the girl's power and sadism go so ridiculously over-the-top.
Author's Response:
Oh my, thank you very much! That's very nice of you to say.
I'm also an obvious fan of exploring the limits (or lack thereof) of power.
Anyways, thanks for reading! I'm happy you enjoyed reading the story!
[Report This]Date: December 06 2020 8:07 PM Title: Chapter 1: Gray Skies
I finally finished this story and I love it!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Date: December 04 2020 11:33 PM Title: Chapter 1: Gray Skies
Wow what a brilliant Story! Thank you! Please make more Storys with Laser Eyes! These are soo rare...
Author's Response:
Hello and thanks for sharing your thoughts. I'm happy you enjoyed the story!
I enjoy laser eyes as well. Laser eyes could show up in a future story perhaps if I feel it's a good fit so to speak.
[Report This]Date: December 03 2020 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 1: Gray Skies
Finally had time to finish reading the whole story. All I can say is what a ride! Delta is the perfect character for this type of story. Her mannerisms and personality definitely show for a Omnipotent Goddess who treats everything as playthings, less than bugs beneath her feet. You are one of the best at writing Omnipotence stories and characters, in your stories. I only wish you had more foot play sometimes, with maybe sweaty, smelly feet to torture people with lol. That being said I cannot wait to see what you write next, no matter the theme!!! Such a talented writer!!!!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm happy to hear the story was enjoyable.
I'm actually not the biggest fan of filth-play with feet though, so you *probably* won't see anything along the lines of sweat/stink there in my future works.
Date: December 02 2020 10:03 PM Title: Chapter 20: Zero-day
" Paradise works, the way most everything program in our world works is to dynamically utilize storage and processing power from the USH computer farms built on the graveyards of the ‘old nations’. "
I felt like asking whether all of the raveged "old world" was just left behind to decay in radioactivity (which would be a massive waste) or if the USH was doing some repopulation projects or whatever.
Good thing that I waited with this question.
“How’s this for a Great Misstep?~” she said, chuckling." In hindsight it's kinda obvious that Delta would make that joke, yet I didn't thought of it before at all.
Maybe I should withhold this question just as much as the one answered in my first quote of this chapter but still: "Isn't the whole time-dilation thing even necessary at this point? With everyone stuck in Paradise anyway does Delta win anything with it?
Author's Response:
Oh thank you, there was a typo in that quote I now fixed in the story.
I think those questions may be answered as you read further in the story. I don't mind you asking them, but I wouldn't want to spoil anything before you're done, of course!
Date: December 02 2020 9:03 PM Title: Chapter 18: Update
The most important race of human history, yet nobody will ever know it even took place.
Delta couldn't have set it up any better with her newfound absolute omnipotence.
Date: December 02 2020 3:28 PM Title: Chapter 12: Stage Fright
Good Idea to have Delta's Antisocial Personality "paralyse" her for a moment after her grand entrance.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I wanted to try and write her realistically getting overwhelmed by everything there.
Date: December 02 2020 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 1: Gray Skies
Honestly you're probably one of if not the best COSMIC OMNIPOTENT NIGHTMARES writers I've seen on this site. I really like how you characterize Delta's antisocialness and megalomania especially in the rare points when she doesn't have actual godhood. There's something really fun about the way you write people exploit breaking their universes, and I think that bleeds into how you invent all these horrible fates to subject humanity to. More than any of your other stories your raging horny for I Have No Mouth And I Must Scream shines through loud and clear as day.
If there's one thing I didn't like it was probably that the time dilation thing kinda falls by the wayside? We never see very huge jumps of time, or if we do they're sort of brushed over. There's no one in the real world (who isn't Delta) to really compare the sheer infinities she's subjecting everyone else to, which makes the final chapter's punch hit a little bit weaker than it should tbh. Which is a shame bc time dilation is a suuuuper cool concept and you seem to think it too.
By the way, I hate to shill other sites on here, but I think you might wanna check out Omnipotentgirls dot net, it's a GW type story hosting site but specifically for omnipotence stories, and a lot of the writers there would be riiiiiight up your alley.
Author's Response:
Oh my, thank you so very much! That's all so kind of you to say. Given the nature of the setting, there were definitely many horrible fates to explore!
I think you have a good point with the time-dilation stuff. It's difficult to balance the real-world disparity when there's not many active people in that real-world world: very true. For Delta, it was perhaps more a means of trying to preserve what she has going on, although she did use its tormenting aspects at parts. Still, there was perhaps more potential I could've explored. I do like it as a concept though, and it was explored a little in "Planet Flattening" for instance. I can imagine myself using it in the future though, so we'll see what the future holds!
As to that website, I have actually heard of that site once before, and I think I might check it out.
Anyways, thanks so much for sharing your thoughts! I appreciate the feedback.
[Report This]Date: December 02 2020 12:57 AM Title: Chapter 1: Gray Skies
I just created an account to compliment you on this story.
I mean I began reading a few hours ago and nearly pauseless teared through until chapter 9.
I'm looking forward to more of Delta's Actions which will probably spin out of control quickly, someone as power-hungry as she won't stay in Bruce's Copy of the Minecraft Ripoff some crafty programmers whipped up after the original was "misstepped" out of existence for too long...
If I had godmode all-access to Paradise I would edit Delta's Name to "OZ_LoveMachine". (If you have no idea what that means google "Summer Wars Antagonist" and you will see why.)
Author's Response:
Oh wow thank you, that's nice of you do! I really do appreciate comments and the like, since they help me see what people like etc.
Happy to see you are enjoying the story, and yeah I don't want to spoil things, but Delta isn't exactly the easily satisfied type per-se.
I looked up that character you mentioned, very interesting!
Thanks again for sharing your thoughts thus far!
[Report This]Date: December 02 2020 12:02 AM Title: Chapter 1: Gray Skies
Haven't finished it yet, but over halfway done. What an epic! Love Delta! Def got a Cyberpunk feel to it. I love her attitude. She's the perfect person for this story!
Author's Response:
Thank you! Feel free to share your thoughts when/if you finish as well. I'm happy the character and the story seems enjoyed so far!
[Report This]Date: December 01 2020 11:52 PM Title: Chapter 1: Gray Skies
Wow, 44 chapters! Don't have enough time to read all of it til the weekend, but I read the first couple and good stuff so far.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm happy it's enjoyed so far.