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Date: March 06 2021 12:11 PM Title: Breaking Boundaries

"Her proposal made sense in her head,[...]"

I learned the words "pliant" & "cowed" from this.

It got rare that I get vocables this way, but it happens every once in a while.

 

I really have to commend you on the Vore Scene focusing on the act of swallowing itself is very rare. Granted, if you have no superpowered throat muscles it's probably not that interesting.

Concerning their talk beneath the overpass: So Thalia's horror at the beginning of the chapter wasn't about the caused problems at all. It was that she would not be the one exerting the power.

My favorite part was suprisingly Thalia dismantling the Cops while being normal-sized - that drove the power home more thoroughly.

 

I came across a weird "coindicence" concerning the title of the story. There is another "Ascending" on your author page. Granted, that one was finished in 2010, so the risk of confusion is probably low.