[Report This]Date: April 18 2011 7:41 AM Title: Trick or Treat, Smell my Feet!
Mean & playful - great!
[Report This]Date: June 19 2008 11:10 PM Title: Trick or Treat, Smell my Feet!
Very good. The detail, the lines said by the characters...everything was crafted well. Please tell me we'll see more?
[Report This]Date: June 19 2008 10:51 AM Title: Trick or Treat, Smell my Feet!
I really enjoyed this story. You did a good job of explaining things at the beginning, but left this mother/daughter's reasons for being so cruel, a mystery. That works for short stories like this. Also, as a fan of foot-related stories that contain scenes of betrayal, violating the trust either a close friend had, or, better yet, between older relatives and younger ones, this holds up will.
If you decide to further this story along, perhaps you should have the little orphan boy begin to shrink further, ending up around half an inch or so. From there, why not just let the smell and sweat of Melissa's foot slowly eradicate and disolve him into nothing? In any event I hope you write further stories long the same lines.
[Report This]Date: June 19 2008 6:52 AM Title: Trick or Treat, Smell my Feet!
I read this story yesterday.
I enjoyed it. Whether or not you decide to continue it is up to you, but if not, then that's a pretty good ending. :)
[Report This]Date: June 19 2008 6:28 AM Title: Trick or Treat, Smell my Feet!
A nice delightful short. I enjoyed it all the way. Great work.
Date: June 18 2008 5:47 PM Title: Trick or Treat, Smell my Feet!
Wow, this is one of those stories that makes its way to be an instant classic, the line about it being a prank, bravo man, bravo.