Reviewer: kbDArt Signed [Report This]
Date: April 03 2023 11:36 PM Title: Chapter 1

Very good erotic short story. I found the dialogue immersive. I liked her bipolar nature, where she gave the guy hope, spending some time to chat and get to know her food, before eating him.

Reviewer: Xiao-renzhe Signed [Report This]
Date: August 06 2020 8:48 PM Title: Chapter 1

I thoroughly enjoyed this! I got my hopes up for the quality of the characters and the dialog based on the description, and you did not disappoint! Shy/unsure predators are definitely one of my favorite, mostly untapped scenarios. It's a very close second for me to willing/sexual vore, and it's equally hard to come by, especially executed this deftly. So glad you got this commission! 

I enjoy the little bit of world-building you fleshed out in this brief story, because it's a lot easier for me to accept the extreme sociopathy required to swallow another person against their will when it takes place in a world wacky enough for congress to have passed such draconian legislature as shrinking people and revoking their status as persons for petty crimes. 

I think my favorite aspect of this story is that Erin sort of ironically overcomes her shyness and aversion towards consuming a person once she's better able to view them as former-equals. Like a private victory for the critically introverted. I also really enjoyed that, while devouring him and feeling him squirm inside of her really excited her, she seemed to still be too shy to capitalize on that excitement "properly" until she was certain he could no longer bear witness to it, even if it's of no real consequence, since it's not like he'd see anything compromising to her from his unfortunate vantage point. 

I'm sure that because this was a commission, it will probably be a one-off, but I'd definitely read anything else you write exploring her future experimentations in "trying new things." 

 

Great story! Thanks for being a writer!