Date: October 05 2020 5:16 PM Title: Day 7: Learning Yoga
Story is definitely a slow burn but is written so well that I'm hooked. I would like to see a little more suggestive material. I think some interactions that would be good would be dad doing the laundry and picking up laundry from his daughters room. Would be fun to picture the messy room as he navigates his way through huge shoes and piles clothes adding to the laundry basket. Large leggings and shorts and then very large bras and undies. Would live to see tye daughter come in while he's staring at the large underwear before putting it in the basket. Would like to see how she responds, does she say something, is she mad or does she think it's funny, or does she say nothing and just take note mentally.
Down the line when he is smaller I think a cool way to move things would be for her to catch him masturbating. She could be mad at first, but maybe she the realizes that he has needs and she is the only female he can be around other than her friends. Because she will not trust him with anyone else. So maybe she cuts him some slack and throws him a peek every now and then.
Just my thoughts.
Author's Response:
yeah lots of people are suggesting him cleaning her room and stumbling upon her clothes, so ill definitely be putting that in. if not the next chapter which i already started, then the one after. thanks for your review and ideas!
Date: October 05 2020 3:45 PM Title: Day 7: Learning Yoga
Still think her needing new bras n hitting a growth spurt n need dad to take her shopping or paying for new shopping for her n a friend be crazy fun
thanks for the effort it really appreciated
Author's Response:
yep, that is also planned for the story! thanks for the suggestion
Date: October 04 2020 9:54 PM Title: Day 1: Jessie and Marcus
Hi! Well done so far.
Some extra scenes you could include could be ones where the daughter unintentionally dominates her father or isn't aware he is in the same room due to his size.
For example he could be lying on the couch but she doesnt see him over the armrest, she casually throws her wet school socks onto his face and continues to the kitchen.
Her father might be trying to help her clean her room and she comes home after school while he is in there, clearing below her bed. He feels guilty and hides thinking she'll go have a shower but her bare soles dangle and scrunch centimetres from his face while she browses her phone
Author's Response:
thank you!
i checked out your story too - 72 REVIEWS i wish i had that many lol but thank you for leaving one yourself
i can tell you like unaware stuff lol but those are great ideas actually and not too extreme that i might be able to add the first one! as for the second, i was actually already planning for him to be stuck under her bed when she comes home with her boyfriend and starts making out with him, which isnt like, super the same but close enough where idk if i'll have both but maybe i will tho but we'll see. can definitely fit the first one in though, thanks for the ideas!
Date: October 04 2020 1:28 PM Title: Day 7: Learning Yoga
How abt he does laundry n discovers her bras n how big they are.... maybe she is embarressed cause she needs new bras ...she has grown n needs to get some but how to tell her lil dad
Author's Response:
dont worry i saw ur other laundry comment and took it into account! its planned for later on in the story
Date: September 27 2020 12:50 PM Title: Day 6: Exhausted
I love this story n the slow play. Fantastic. Thanks
Author's Response:
thanks again!
Date: September 26 2020 9:26 PM Title: Day 1: Jessie and Marcus
Love this, thank you for another great chapter? Curious to see how this develops - is she going to become more dominant over her Dad, more rebellious?
On another note, are you still in school or do you teach?
Author's Response:
definitely more dominant but still kinda slow with time. idk if i'll make her rebellious tho, i kinda like their relationship. i wanna make him instigate it more than her.
and no im not a teacher lol. my writing would probably be better and i wouldnt need to use an online thesaurus every 2 minutes and i'd DEFINITELY proofread what i write lmao
Date: September 26 2020 9:21 PM Title: Day 6: Exhausted
I love this story n the slow play. Fantastic. Thanks
Author's Response:
thanks :)
Date: September 16 2020 6:26 AM Title: Day 5: The First Guest
Amazing story so far! I LOVE the subtle incremental role reversal, the "slow burn" so to say, especially with a gentle giantess. Jessie is so sweet, and I find having her not try to abuse her considerable power over her dad makes her feel more mature/wise, which ironically makes her feel even more dominant over her ailing father in the grand scheme of things.
The way Marcus so easily accepts his daughters suggestions, and how he earnestly, and a little desperately, seeks her approval after cleaning the kitchen or making breakfast, hints at a deeply submissive, desperate to please side of him I'm looking forward to being explored.
And I love how no-one feels toxic or hurt about the whole scenario. I find it feels a lot more sincere when the power dynamic switches naturally, like Jessie isn't trying to usurp her dear father, but due to her care for him combined with his slowly unfolding submissive nature, she must accept a maternal role regarding her father, while he follows a more obedient and humble role in their relationship.
All in all, great story, so much potential, is my personal favorite between the two "How to train" series, but I can wait for the other to finish. Keep up the awsome writing!
Author's Response:
its so gratifying when i see comments like this :))) u pretty much are getting out of it EXACTLY what im trying to portray, thats what i want both characters to seem like and im glad thats coming across without me needing to explicitly say it. thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: September 03 2020 8:49 AM Title: Day 5: The First Guest
Quite the cliffhanger there
Author's Response:
multiple sleepovers and parties and friend visits incoming over the next few weeks!
[Report This]Date: August 28 2020 10:41 AM Title: Day 4: Job Hunting
Just lovely. Really liked the braid the hair part. Anxious to see what happens next!
Author's Response:
thank you! glad you are enjoying it
Date: August 25 2020 1:41 PM Title: Day 4: Job Hunting
Really loving this story and the direction it's taking. Change in power balance like this is one of my favourite things. I know you're prioritising your other series, but this is one of my favourites and hope you'll find time for it :)
Author's Response:
Hopefully I will always be able to update it at least once a week :) The other one gets priority because I want to finish it up faster but if I only have enough time to write one chapter a week then it'd be for this one
[Report This]Date: August 21 2020 2:34 PM Title: Day 1: Jessie and Marcus
Omg, simply loved the start. Loved the slow burn you seen to be going for. Though their relationship will chance, I hope she will stay kinda gentle with him. Not my thing when the bigger character goes sexually insane and start acting with violence out of the nowhere! Hope you keep exploring their relationship in interesting ways like you did here. Also, can we expect some foot interaction down the path?
Of course, anyway you go Ill keep reading it! Thanks for this and another incredible stories, friend! 🥰💙
Author's Response:
Yes! That's exactly how I feel about a lot of stories too, I like stories that are a lot softer (idk how else to describe it), like they're not completely gentle and G-rated, but they're not psycopathic from day 1. There's gonna be foot interaction a few chapters down the line but imo there's a lot more foot focus in my other story
Date: August 19 2020 3:01 PM Title: Day 3: Movie Night
Loving the concept please write more and more frequently
Author's Response:
i am doing it as often as i can 😫 im doing it for free and it can take a few hours just to write a chapter! but thank you!
Date: August 19 2020 1:10 PM Title: Day 1: Jessie and Marcus
I like the mention of Marcus's mom being around. Leaves options for the occasional interactions with her as dwindles down, even for a whole spin off down the line if Marcus were to change hands.
Author's Response:
lol yep that is 100% why i included it. she'll be popping by later on
[Report This]Date: August 19 2020 2:19 AM Title: Day 3: Movie Night
Clueless was a thing that existed in 1995.
remembers 1995!
Author's Response:
yep! just saw the movie a few weeks ago and loved it haha, decided to include it
Date: August 10 2020 9:38 PM Title: Day 1: Jessie and Marcus
Oh I agree, I wasn't suggesting that she only wear thongs and I doubt the girl who said that to me really does. I just liked the visual I got from the statement it was funny but also suggestive. Regarding your story I pictured him struggling to fold regular sized underwear and the daughter laughing and maybe suggesting thongs might be more manageable for him. Or him coming across a thong and being embarrassed and or disgusted and her joking saying her ass swallows everything up anyway, maybe followed by a so he better look out lol.
Author's Response:
yeah stuff to keep in mind. i like the humiliating dialogue aspects to my stories so i might do that at least. guess ill see what happens
Date: August 10 2020 1:50 PM Title: Day 1: Jessie and Marcus
I like the Laundry Ideas. Would work on several levels the embarrassment of collecting the her dirty laundry such as underwear then maybe struggling to fold things as his daughter would like especially as he gets smaller. On the thongs I remember a friend of mine telling me she has to wear thongs because her ass swallows everything. Turned me on to know end. Would be fun tonsee dads reaction to such a statement. Im sure she will think of other fun ways to give her dad purpose and for him to earn his keep.
Author's Response:
lol im aware that some girls only wear thong sized, but thats not the experience of most girls, even thicker ones. not sure if i'd incorporate that aspect but i'll keep it in mind, thanks for reviewing :)
Date: August 09 2020 5:03 PM Title: Day 2: Being Productive
So good ! Agreed laundry duty means he stumbles upon her bras n maybe sees some r B cup n newer ones r C cup and he really starts sweating thinking his daughter breasts r growing and at his size they r starting to look very big...laundry is great idea. Love the concept
Author's Response:
thank you :)
[Report This]Date: August 09 2020 12:44 PM Title: Day 2: Being Productive
Hm maybe for a chore he should have to do laundry and get embarrassed when he realizes he has to do his daughter's laundry too. He seems bad with his emotions so he just gets more awkward about it when he starts folding her underwear and stumbles on a thong.
Author's Response:
good idea! i had that in my other story but i'll add it to this one too
[Report This]Date: August 09 2020 10:15 AM Title: Day 2: Being Productive
Great stuff.
Author's Response:
thanks!