Date: May 30 2020 1:36 PM Title: Chapter 1
This was SOOO good!
I wish there was more mother-in-law gts/sm content like this! The story premise was so good! I love the tension of the married couple having to live with the wife's mother, which already makes the wife feel like a kid having to live at home, but the added tension of the husband being tiny and always being kept by the mother makes it seem almost like he's a toy, and the mother is saying to her daughter "you can have this back when you're old enough!" while, she plays with him herself. I also always love the somewhat cute but embarrassing sexual appraisal by the mother-in-law, like the "oh, honey, he's a keeper! (I'm almost jealous)" and the semi-erotic (sometimes fully erotic) teasing of the husband by the mother-in-law (especially since he's tiny and can't do anything about it!) Type stuff.
Even though this makes me feel dirtier, I even like the interactions with the little sister-in-law. The cute teasing and poking and "do you like it in there!?" And the grabby hands and possessive "little people are toys" attitude and the innocent yet terrifying "but they don't mind when I play with them!" childish attitude. It's always really great! (But let me just clarify that I don’t like scenes in stories that feature blatantly sexual interactions with minors)
In terms of the actual smut, I don't usually like that much insertion (or blatant intercourse, especially between near relations), but it worked well. I would have honestly preferred some foot/inshoe/sock content(like Jacksmith), but I understand this was a commission and that might not be your thing anyway. I also found the idea that in this universe, tinies are not only really durable, but can go long amounts of time and inside tight spaces without having to breathe to be interesting. Not only that, but that they can also be swallowed and survive totally unharmed. That's the only kind of vore I like. Honestly, just some footplay, and this story would have been almost PERFECT!
Overall, there's only one word I can use to describe this story that totally captures how I feel about it: HOT!!! ;)
Great work!!!
(P.S. I ADORE "My Little Canary"!!! Gts/Sm fluff is the BEST FLUFF!!!)
Author's Response:
Wow, thank you for the glowing review. I can feel your apprieciation and admiration for this story in every sentence.
Even in the source material Kurumi is really clingy to Mu-kun when her own husband isn't around, which is a constant headache for Hinata. I figured for this story, with Mu-kun being so small she could get away with so much more and since Hinata would have to be the one working instead there's nothing either of them can do about it. :D
I mostly agree with you on children in stories like this, best used showing how childish antics and curiousity can lead to awkward and terrifying interactions, but with that will sometimes come very 'inappropriate' actions. A good example would be in my other story "My Little Canary" where Sarah's little sister imitates her big sister without really knowing what she's doing. But yes, blatant sexual acts with blatant sexual intention between minors and adults are a tricky, touchy subject that I tried to avoid if the minors are helpless, like in my stories with Cassandra where she has basically orphanages set up for them, or allude to them if the minors are in control, like Sarah's sister.
As far as the content of the smut I write, I tend to avoid foot fetish subjects for two major reasons. Firstly, within the GTS community there is an overwhelming amount of foot/insole/sock/footwear content. And secondly, which is one of the main reasons I even started writing in the first place, is that I'm just not into feet which makes it difficult for me to write about them. As you pointed out, there are plenty of authors, like Jacksmith, who write a ton of foot-based smut and I don't begrudge them, write what you like and all that :). That's not to say I never include some foot stuff now and then, but as you realized the commissioner themself didn't ask for me to include any foot scenes, so I didn't. Also I agree that non-fatal vore is best vore for light-hearted, fun stories like this.
Again, thank you for the review, and I hope to hear your opinions more in the future! :D
(And thanks for the shout out for "My Little Canary", as the first story I ever completed it holds a special place in my heart)