[Report This]Date: January 25 2020 9:18 PM Title: The Box
Another amazing chapter. Really liked how you depicted him going crazy in sensory deprivation. Even when people have room to move around, solitary confinement takes a real toll on your mind. People who have been put in solitary confinement for 20 days report that their ability to distinguish reality from what’s being made up by their head disappears. It really fucks with you, having absolutely nothing to do, no stimuli at all. It’s torture.
But anyway, sad stuff all around. Pail needs a hug, but judging by the tags on this story, it will be a very long time before he gets treated warmly by anyone again.
Author's Response:
Yeah, solitary confinement is brutal. Thankfully I don't know from first-hand experience.
[Report This]Date: January 24 2020 7:13 PM Title: Busted
Alright. Another great chapter that pulled some of my heartstrings. I hate Barney right now, and I really hope someone torture him for what he and his lacks are doing with Paul. But, I am most angry with Sarah. I know he shrunk and technically he no longer is socially perceived as a person. But, Paul is her fucking brother for god sake! If I knew someone tied and abused my siblings the way Barney did, even if our relation might not be always good, all hell would break out.
Therefore, I can only sense some kind of sexual craving or hidden agenda in that kind of coldness. I am not talking about sadism, because even sadism revolves around trust and a otherwise safe enviroment for both - who domminates and who is domminated (yeah, I know a thing or two about psychology). I am saying she wants to have Paul down, completelly isolated and at her mercy.
I don't think Barney simply invented everything about Katelyn. There is too much detail and he wouldn't risk using Sarah's name in vain, specially if it envolved her personal time humilliating Katelyn. But I also don't think Katelyn enjoyed these events.
Paul isn't a bad person and wasn't cold towards any of his sisters. So why? I don't know why I had hopes Sarah would punish Barney for hitting Paul :( That rings the most important question in this chapter: why so much need to make Paul suffer? Why go so far as to threaten to squish him? Not even worrying about his wonds? I am really worried about this point - will he be alright?
After this chapter, I hope Sarah ends up shrinking and at the mercy of her own tinies or boyfriend, only to have Paul rescue her... ah the irony!
Sorry for any grammar mistakes. Also in a hurry today T_T
Author's Response:
Thanks! It's interesting to see you go into psychology with the characters.
[Report This]Date: January 24 2020 5:26 PM Title: Busted
Well this is sad. Now it seems as though Barney set Paul up. Sad to say, but I think Bethany may have even been in on it. Barney hated Paul because he resents him for ever being big, so he had Bethany proposition him, accused Paul of raping her, and made up that stuff about Katelyn to rile up Paul enough to get Paul to attack him. I hope Barney meets his end under the bottom of shoe.
[Report This]Date: January 24 2020 6:42 AM Title: Busted
I swear if the "report this" button had a reason code for cliffhanger abuse - i.e. well-written and thought out story with endings that leave you impatiently awaiting the next entry just to find out what happens next - well my friend, you'd be in trouble! Consider this a fair warning, unless of course you decide to update asap to appease our hunger. MOAR!!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks, and I'm about to upload the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: January 24 2020 4:37 AM Title: Busted
These last few chapters have been quite entertaining, especially after the previous ones where it was almost depressing to see Paul struggle to adapt in this tiny community.
The whole subplot with Bethany is quite refreshing. It gave Paul a little light in this dark future he is in and he also made love with a woman who seems to like him as well.
However, I don’t trust Bethany. I had my doubts, but after reading this latest chapter about Barney finding out, it had to be Bethany. I don’t think there are cameras, mics, or anyone spying on them. I think Bethany told Barney and blackmailed Paul. Maybe Barney used Bethany as a test. Something like that. Bethany probably played nice to trick Paul.
Man, the fight with Barney felt good. Even though Paul lost, I felt proud of Paul when he busted Barney’s lip. He seemed untouchable. Good to know these models could be taken down and not invincible.
That last scene is what inspired me to finally write a review again. The past few chapters just made me mad at Sarah and this whole community for how they treated Paul, but this kind of twist with Sarah is kind of interesting.
I love how Sarah picked him up while he was all tied up. Part of me thought she was going to do something sexual and my perverted mind was ready for it, haha!
However, she places him in a tiny box which basically seems like a black coffin for tiny people. We know he won’t stay in there for long because then there would be no story.
I wonder if Paul will share his side of the story or ask if Sarah had sex with Katelyn. It’s kind of messed up for Paul to learn that his sister sexually played with his companion and then Sarah then locks him up in a box. Family bonding, am I right? Lol
A few grammar mistakes here and there, and I think you may have switched a Barney in for Paul at one point. Or it was the other way around. I forgot, but there was a moment where it felt as if Paul was talking to another Paul.
Anyway, fantastic chapter and I’m excited to see where this goes. I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review! I enjoy your analysis.
[Report This]Date: January 22 2020 9:43 PM Title: Bethany
Alright. I am angry at myself for taking so long to get to this story. A lot of problems are keeping me busy right now so just managed some time now. Let me say you got me invested in all the main characters and I love the way you build the story line.
On a side note, I am also happy it took me this long to read.
One thing that always bothers me in this kind of story is the way the family treats the main character after he shrinks. Although he is her son, the mother is always cold towards him and even sharing almost all their youth together, the sisters treat him as little more than a bug, only ever seeking revenge or pleasure. That is common in giantess stories revolving around families.
And oh boy, you got me worried for some time this was going to be the case in this one: Giantess without any real emotion. But then, ch. 9 and 10 happened. We and Paul got some information on the stoic Sarah personal life - namely that the boyfriend she bragged so much prefers a tiny over her and she probably uses Barney to compensate, giving him more "freedom" in exchange. This is a turning point.
This kind of insight can be used by Paul to bound, both with her sister and Barney. Maybe, behind the stoik mask, there is a young girl who only seeks company and the approval of her mother. Maybe Barney is more than just a pimp.
Someone like Hannah might try to help in the future, but, as long as he is a tiny, Paul is his family (and mainly Sarah's) property. I believe at least one family member is going to have a change of heart and see Paul as her flesh and blood. I don't believe is the mother, who is far too involved with politics to get in touch with her emotions. Sarah is my first choice because of the mess her personal life appears to be (and thats why no tiny dares to talk about it), but judging by the last paragraph on ch. 10, the change of heart is still far ahead.
Sorry for the long review and for any grammar mistakes. English is not my primary language and I wrote this in a hurry.
Thanks for writing and sharing with us. Keep up the good work.
PS. Added you and your story to my favorites :)
Author's Response:
Thank you! The characters I write are real in my mind; I try to think of how they would realistically act in certain situations. Those other kinds of stories you eluded to tend to see their females less as characters rather than vehicles to get to the specific interactions they want to see, which I guess is fine for people who just care about smut and not story, but it's not the kind of thing I'm interested in writing.
Date: January 22 2020 1:57 PM Title: Bethany
Another wonderful chapter, a joy to read . You tell a very fine tale
Author's Response:
Thank you, I appreciate it!
[Report This]Date: January 22 2020 6:53 AM Title: Bethany
Fantastically written! One error, I think you might have had Bethany originally named Brittany - he calls her by that name earlier. Otherwise this is perfect! I have to ask though - is Brie going to be taking him in soon? Ending seems like it lends itself to that and she hasn't made an appearance for quite sometime now. I feel like she'd love to get her claws on him now that he's small.
Author's Response:
Ah that mistake slipped by me in my proofreading! I often get names mixed up in my head, even of my own characters.
[Report This]Date: January 22 2020 5:57 AM Title: Bethany
I'm really enjoying this story so far. I always like introspective ones like this that take deep looks into the relationships and power dynamics between tinies and giants to be my favorites, keep up the good work!
On the plot for this chapter, if I had to guess what's going to come craching down, I'd guess that Bethany was lying about being pregnant and she is now pregnant with his child. Could be something else though.
Also, ever since the concept of growers was introduced last chapter and that other commenter posted about Katelyn finding a cure, I've been imagining in my head Katylen not getting some scientific cure, but just becoming a normal grower. It's a fun and heartwarming little scenario to think about, her becoming a grower and then coming back to take Paul as her companion. Even if it doesn't actually happen in the story its a nice thought to have.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: January 14 2020 5:01 AM Title: Adjusting
Quite a few interesting plot points your building up:
1. Paul's mother's senatorial campaign goals/plans about tiny life improvement, and why having a shrinker son is negative(?) to her goals.
2.Which bigs he eventually interacts with and how badly they treat him (notice the cest tag).
3. Bethany's developing tryst with Paul. Genuine or is she just using him as a chance to secure her future based on how her shrinker dad and his tiny wife got to stay with his family?
4. How Sarah and his family will act if he becomes a father? Joy, indifference, or possibly even outrage?
5.The future beating Barney will give him if he finds out Paul slept with Bethany and if Sarah condones it or steps in.
6.Barney's deus ex machina elevator for a future escapade? Run Paul run.
7.And finally who the future grower (or growers) will be in this story.
Excited to see how this story develops.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: January 13 2020 4:57 PM Title: Sarah
Really great and immersive writing. Looking forward to new chapters! Love the sense of ownership the Bigs have towards their littles.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: January 13 2020 9:34 AM Title: Prologue
Like the concept and the world building.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: January 13 2020 9:34 AM Title: Prologue
Like the concept and the world building.
Date: January 13 2020 3:44 AM Title: Prologue
Since it's in Gettysburg, I'm assuming that you know littlestown. Are you from the area?
Author's Response:
I'm actually not from around Gettysburg, but I've been there a handful of times. I know of Littlestown but I've never been there.
Date: January 13 2020 3:41 AM Title: Prologue
Very cool intro. So it's set in Gettysburg. Fascinating.
Date: January 03 2020 11:35 AM Title: Prologue
Great story. I can assume that Paul’s desire to be together with his classmate, because she will be gentle, will face unpleasant reality, that she began to relate to him in a completely different way, and the girl, a lover of teams who wanted to breed with him, will probably show herself from all angles, including from the outside and from the inside :) Perhaps later, GG will try to escape to find a cure and see the life of wild communities ...How about such a turn - Due to the constant decrease in the number of bigos (decadence, yes), previously closed studies on the return to full size after the reduction of the virus were resumed.Several of the experimental subjects purchased for research have been successfully converted to big size, one of them is Katelyn :) She finds her former owner, reverse relationship, etc.
Author's Response:
That would be a very cute twist. I'm glad you're enjoying the story!
Date: January 03 2020 7:31 AM Title: Sarah
Great story so far
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: December 29 2019 1:28 PM Title: Sarah
Wonderful to read your work again. Love the angle you have taken and it’s very well written,
Thanks for sharing
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: December 29 2019 3:42 AM Title: Prologue
Bro i need you to answer me. Do you remember the 'shrink roulette' that you mentioned in your blog as a story you'd like to write down. Can't wait to read it, one day. I hope you didn't give up that idea. The 'spin the bottle' game, in which eight people are seated together in front of a table, in front of them are 8 carefully measured shots that, if drinked, will shrink them to different sizes. This story MUST soon be write down.
[Report This]Date: December 28 2019 3:52 AM Title: Prologue
Really good story it's my favorite kind of stories, but you should add more footwear
Author's Response:
I don't want to give too much away, but a few chapters down the line you might be happy!