Date: August 10 2008 5:09 PM Title: Lunch with Kimberly
what are you using to type your story? I use microsoft office and havent ever had problem. There is even a paste from microsoft word option.
Date: March 25 2008 2:52 PM Title: Get it on
I haven't posted a new story here ever since the domain move, so I wouldn't know just yet.
Did they change how stories are written during the shift?
Author's Response: Not really. It just seems that every paragraph that i put into my story is removed when I put it in. Then I am left going back over the story and correcting for this error. I realize that my tardyness in doing this makes for trouble reading a story. Thank you for keeping me from getting complacent Stylesrj
Date: March 23 2008 2:01 PM Title: Lunch with Kimberly
hey man dont worry about the grammar, this is a great story just get that next part done.
Author's Response: Thank you SeallowMeAlive. I intend to do so. I actually wrote the next chapter but my computer did not save it so no I must rewrite it. Then of course I posted an addition here that was meant for the story the Resort. Cant get any technical stuff right lately :( Don't worry. A new chapter should be up here soon. I just have to make myself sit down and rewrite it. Thanks for the review and encouragement. :)
Date: March 18 2008 9:33 PM Title: Get it on
This chapter needs spaces between paragraphs.
It was quite hard to read
Author's Response: You know, it's weird. No matter what I do before I add the chapter, the site always seems to delete any space between paragraphs so I'm left with a whole story to go through or you, the reader, must deal with the wall of words. Does this ever happen to you?
Date: March 01 2008 12:37 PM Title: The cause of death
...she with gastronomic hunger, I with the desire to be eaten..
... cast my eyes down in abject respect only to be confronted by her superb thighs, her dress-hem stretched across only just keeping things PG. I felt faint with a strong passion, wanted to fall to my knees and bury my head under that skimpy canopy and worship her feminine alter, abase myself between her thighs with the knowledge or hope that eventually she might be swallowing me and, after long last, the process will commence of blending me into her immaculate body....
i love this scene, i just hope jake or one of other 'food' come willingly with the desire to be eaten.. and they get 'fourplay' get into beautifull mouth..
Author's Response: that section of the chapter was written by banfield. it was good wasn't it? glad you liked it and thank you for writing a review. i will be adding more sooner or later
[Report This]Date: February 23 2008 7:49 PM Title: Lunch with Kimberly
I'm enjoying this story and it's an imagiative premise. A story with a belly-full of potential I'd say. ladyprey
Author's Response: How does one know if one has written a good story? When one gets a review from Lady Prey! Thanks man, I hope you enjoy the chapters to come.
Date: January 06 2008 5:53 AM Title: Lunch with Kimberly
Well, 'girlfood' I really enjoyed reading "The foodchain." and I'll tell you what I've done. As I started reading it I found it worthwhile to copy and paste it into my docs. Then I began reading it through and made many corrections (all errors are highlighted by my wordperfect system). But then came the last part. The minute victim had been saved from Kimberly's full digestion so he will not become part of her desirable black body. However, I see that it will be continued, and you know, I'd love to review the continuation before it's posted and correct any grammatical errors that may be apparant. Other than that, I shall be looking forward to the next instalment. Thank you very much!
Author's Response: First, thank you for your review banfield. I am happy you like my storytelling enough to want to pitch in with proofreading. This is quite a complement as you are one of several authors on this website whose writing I hold in high esteem. For the record and to be fair to myself, my computer just died so I am simply typing in the “chapter addition” section of shrinktopia as quickly as I can without the aid of spell-check underlining grammatical flaws. Compounding this is my shortcomings in spotting writing mistakes unless I print a document off and go over the hard copy with a pen. I do intend to add to this story. If you feel compelled to help I can send it to you to look over before the final posting. I am sure I could learn a thing or two about storywriting from you. Finally, I am going to include some mastication of these tiny men in coming chapters. It may take a little while but please bear with me. Thanks.
[Report This]Date: January 05 2008 1:36 PM Title: Lunch with Kimberly
oops, forgot to rate. Again, nicely done.
Author's Response: Thank you very much Tenken 13.
Date: January 05 2008 5:44 AM Title: Lunch with Kimberly
Excellent history! Many thanks! I wait for continuation!
Author's Response: Thanks. I will add again when I can. Hopefully soon.
Date: January 05 2008 2:28 AM Title: Lunch with Kimberly
A pretty fun read... keep it up
Author's Response: I have every intention to do so. Hopefully this story will continue to hold your interest. Thanks for the encouragement. Its greatly appreciated.