Date: June 25 2024 12:15 AM Title: When We First Met
You know why I like your stories? Your stories have great world building. I like how you immerse the reader with songs, tv shows, etc. You also have good character dynamics, where no-one feels like a cardboard cutout. The fact that you can do this, not only with the main characters, but even with the background characters, too.
Author's Response:
Got a welcome surprise in my email today, I'm glad to hear you enjoy them (: . I always try to make them feel realistic and that these are real people in a real world that's pretty much ours besides that whole shrinkage thing. Real people with real feelings and realistic reactions to what's going on around them and their own personal stories and etc, even characters that don't get a whole lot of focus. I'm pretty stoked that a story I wrote five years ago now is still getting good reviews even a few years afterwards, and there will definitely be more stories in the future.
Date: April 15 2022 1:41 AM Title: When We First Met
I don’t know if you’re going to read this review as you said that
you’re busy with your life because of a major move and all in the
chapter notes of your most recent story (up to this date), Work
Nightmare, but I still must write it:
This story’s AMAZING! I
started reading the other story, Work Nightmare, but I wasn’t actually
understanding it too well because of the many character/event references
to this one, Blast from the Past, so, after understanding that Work
Nightmare is a continuation of Blast from the Past, I stopped reading
Work Nightmare and came here to read Blast from the Past. And what a
Blast (pun intended lol)!
First, by reading it, I could finally
understand who’s Kate, Brian and some other lightly described characters
in Work Nightmare, but I’ll let the opinions regarding Work Nightmare
for that one, when I finish reading it. Let’s talk about Blast from the
Past.
I enjoyed a LOT the story. It didn’t started as slow as I
was expecting it to be, despite the main events taking a bit longer to
happen sometimes. I also enjoyed how nostalgic you are in the scene
descriptions, always talking about musics, cars and all about the 90s.
It made me remember my parents, they’re like that many times, mostly my
mother, who’s always hearing lots of Seventies, Eighties and Nineties
music here at home. Because of them, I like many 80s and 90s musics too
(but I like modern music as well, my parents mostly don’t lol.). I even
recognized some musics you wrote about in your story, as my mother hears
them a lot. This made me feel like the story was written by one of
them, lol.
Talking about dates, there’s a little mistake, I
guess, in your story. Somewhere in chapter 2 (When we first met), you
show that the day is Wednesday, October 6th, 1993. Then, in that day,
Anthony goes with Kate to Brian’s place, is eaten, and leaves her body
the ‘nature way’, coming to wake up some minutes after being pooped out
in the next day’s morning, in the beginning of the chapter 5 (Take your
shrunken guy friend to work). But the beginning of that chapter says
that the date is still Wednesday, October 6th, when it should be
Thursday, October 7th, as it passed a whole night and the next day rose
before Anthony was pooped out of Kate, as the beginning of the chapter
shows. It’s just a observation, nothing that spoil that GREAT story of
yours.
Something very different that I liked but found confusing
at first is the way that Anthony narrates the story. It’s all in first
person, under his view, but he seems to have full knowledge about
anything that’s happening around him, even if the events are out of
reach of his senses. For example, when he was inside Kate’s stomach, he
could say about everything Kate and Brian were doing outside, even
little touches Brian gave her and all. Or when he was being sloshed with
digesting ravioli inside Bridget’s belly: even being inside her belly,
he could tell where she was, what she was grabbing, to where she was
heading, what street she was, he told us even the model, year and color
of her car and the car that was parked beside it,! Not to mention that
he mentioned even the rust spots in her car! All of that while confined
inside her stomach and without having seen her car before! What is that,
‘god mode’? lol
The only thing that I missed is a better mention
of the first times that Kate ate him. The story just tells us that she
ate him three times for accident and twice on purpose. Maybe describing
how it happened, even lightly, would make the scene wordier and maybe
strange? Who knows, but I think Anthony could tell us that while
thinking about it when inside her stomach. I say that I missed it
because I’m all curious about how these five first times were, and
considering that the story gave us descriptions about things that
weren’t that important to the plot and/or events and/or characters...
maybe it could give us a better vision about the previous vore events
Anthony endured, for example how scary the first time she ate him was
for both Anthony and Kate, and how they discovered that he’s able to
easily survive the whole digestion process. Still, please don’t think
I’m telling you that this is bad, no, I’ll write it again: this doesn’t
spoil that GREAT story!
Well, I already wrote twice that your
story is great, I don’t think I need to tell you that again, despite
wanting too (yeah, I'm all about how I LOVED that story!). Ah, I almost
forgot: the way you described the characters, telling not only about
their bodies but also how they spoke, how they walked, what music they
listened to and all, made me learn new ways of describing my own
characters, putting more life in them, so I thank you for the lesson :).
I'm now feeling a bit sad (LOL!) that the story ended. It... yeah, I was going again to write in caps that it was great but I guess you already know hahaha. Your story has a really different and interesting ending, with him being grown to normal size and having a good life, being perfectly adapted to a normal-sized reality. Kate and her relatives, together with Brian, are indeed his best friends ever and Anthony owns them a LOT.
And I wonder, do
Anthony talk normally with Kate, remembering all the size interactions
he had with her, including the travels inside her body? How is his
normal-sized mind reacting to that now? Reacting to see her as a shorter
person now, looking at her body and remembering when it was gigantic
compared to him? Do they talk about it? I also can't help wondering how
were his first days as a normal-sized person. Seeing people everywhere
from a new, bigger perspective. seeing objects that once were huge, many
times his size, now easily handed with a single hand (or even finger)
of him... so much thoughts! This only shows that your story's perfect!
There are so few stories that causes that feelings on me!
Oh, and... I'm sad
because Kate and Brian did break up. Brian was such a good guy,
supported Anthony with her all the way, understanding his situation and
not being mad at him because of the implied intimacy he had with Kate
and all... but Brian just ended in India trying to find himself, a lost
man. I really really expected him to marry her and have a family with her.
Well, now that I just finished reading that one, I'll resume reading 'Work Nightmare'. Better saying, I'll read it from the start, now I'm sure that I'll understand everything, as some pieces of text from that story are now making sense.
I'd love to give you about 93 stars but I can only give five.Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the detailed review, these make my day whenever I do see one because it tells me that people are actually reading my work haha. Yeah, some of these stories do tie into each other and this will become especially apparent whenever I do put out my big story involving all of my characters, whenever that will be. Especially Work Nightmare and First Date the most which have ties to other stories, I feel at this point. There's a lot of interpreting on Anthony's and many of my other characters part whenever they're inside, based of of what they can hear on the outside, maybe the setting down of a chair that they've seen before in the room that they're currently in or the ruffling of a shirt or the sound of a kiss, usually the sound of their surroundings on the outside kinda guiding them on what's going on. Pretty much, it's based on hearing what's going on and guessing, even though they can't see. At least with the Kate and Brian situation. Now with Bridget that whole ordeal, I put a little bit of my own personal input into the details to be honest. But for most part, it's all interpreted from what they can hear going on and using conversation between characters to put the pieces together, and in some cases feel(like pressure on the stomach or something like that), on the outside. That whole date thing is on me, I'll try to fix it when I can.
I always try to make sure and fit the mood and setting of a story with music and TV shows and Movies and fads and stuff at the like, to really seem more believable. Just enough where it seems like it happens to be a story set in the time period, but not like focused on only just the time period.
You're right about the me not really diving into detail about the first time Kate swallowed him, that's something I wish I would of mentioned more and gone more into detail about now when I think about it, maybe it'll be something I might touch on in the big story I'll do, again, whenever that will be.
I always try to really put detail into my characters and how they are, because they are people after all so I do try to be very realistic with them, I'm happy to hear that I've inspired you in some way haha.
I did mention a little bit on Kate and Anthony's relationship as he's now normal sized a little on Work Nightmare, since they did take somewhat different paths in life after awhile, but they still keep in touch and how he views things like that. I'd imagine the two still talk about it from time to time, whenever it's possible and around someone who knows the secret.
Kate and Brian breaking up is something that I did just for the sake of realism, because not every relationship is going to last. I'll touch a little bit more on this in my big story, and what Brian might be up to nowadays, because if you notice I wrote that the last time Anthony talked him was a few days after the events of Work Nightmare, Easter of 2001. And what he might be up to in India.
Thank you very much for your input, it really means a lot to me whenever I get feedback like this, I'm glad you love it.
Date: August 06 2021 8:40 PM Title: Growing Up
I'm not sure what to say, but after reading all of it I really loved the story and also the unaware parts. It's pretty awesome. ^~^
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm somewhat surprised I'm getting reviews on this story, don't worry either, this won't be the last we see of Anthony (;
Date: June 03 2021 2:54 PM Title: When We First Met
Holy cow just when i thought i knew all of the good vore stories, i come across this too. The unaware in this is so on point. The interactions with tony and his environment and the movement and sloshing is fantastic. Dude i have to ask, do you take commissions? If so you have to let me contact you and put in one. 11/10 stars
Author's Response: Thank you, nah I don't do commissions, it's all a labor of love for me. Feel free to contact me though.
Date: August 02 2019 3:12 PM Title: A Bellyful of Ravioli
I really like this story. It gives two of my favorite things: 1900s nostalgia and giantess vore. The flow is not too complex but enough to give the readers the info that's necessary and even better you did your research on what was in the 1900s. (That or you have a really good memory lol.) I actually learned what year specifically Vans were made by reading this. Awesome job.
Author's Response: Thank you haha, I don't think I've ever heard someone refer to the 1990s as the 1900s but there's a first time for everything lol. I did a little bit of research based with my own knowledge for the time setting of my story, I wasn't really conscious during the 90s. I actually don't remember writing anything about Vans in this story lol. I plan on making most of my stories that I write on here period pieces, maybe I'll do a modern story in the near future. Glad you're enjoying the story.
Date: August 01 2019 9:39 AM Title: The Suburbs
Nice story. I hope Bridget remains unaware the entire time, and that after coming out the other end is an unaware flush
Author's Response: She'll be unaware the whole time, that's a fact. Ehhh, we'll see if we'll go the route of Anthony getting out of her that way. I'll think about it. Thanks for reviewing btw.
Date: August 01 2019 1:08 AM Title: When We First Met
Really liking this a lot, more unaware endosomatopilia would be awesome, what you've done soo far has been fantastic, keep up the good work :)
Author's Response: Thank you haha, glad you're enjoying this (:
Date: July 29 2019 7:21 PM Title: When We First Met
Pretty good so far. Kinda sad you skipped over him getting out of Kate. Would’ve been a fun read. Haha.
Author's Response: I didn't wanna get too gross y'know haha, glad you're enjoying the story (:
Date: July 25 2019 1:46 AM Title: When We First Met
This is an awesome story. I'm loving the unaware parts of this story. Would love to see some feet material too, but regardless I can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'll probably add some part of the story regarding Kate's feet at some point.