[Report This]Date: July 31 2020 5:17 PM Title: Exposure
I seen this story started over a year ago. I also noticed their aren't many chapters and most are moderately lengthed and well written. Also the beginning felt like I was missing out on something. As if the story or characters should have already had some familiarity about them. Maybe from previous stories. Wasn't sure I could enjoy this as I couldn't get a feel for it.
But then I read the six chapters available and realized that I wished you were able to add more to it more often as i was genuinely impressed. I especially like how it feels these two women aren't bad people and that they don't care for people who do bad to good people. It was exciting to read randall's transformation and subsequent destruction of his family members. Then to find out she transformed the gang members into his family members for the psychological abuse and to not punish good people was a great twist in the story. And the way she is trying to help Marcus recover better than normal healing is a nice use of her gifts as well.
This is a great story so far and looking forward to ore
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review, I'm glad to hear that the story grew on you the more I was able to post.
To be perfectly honest, the first chapter was actually supposed to be a one-shot (Enma didn't even have a name when I wrote it) and the other aspects of the chapter where supposed to hint at a life she 'left behind' (I had recently watched John Wick 3 and that may or may not have influenced that). However, I liked the idea so much that I expanded it to a multi-chapter story. Oh god, I JJ mystery boxed this! But I was at least, hopefully, able to give satisfactory payoffs to the things I have fleshed out so far and what I have planned in the coming chapters.
It's good to hear Tess and Enma don't come off too 'evil' per se, I mean Enma wasn't exactly kidding about actually wanting to eat Randall's family but she's also a retired contract killer who is learning empathy towards people she doesn't care about. Tess is still far more in touch with her humanity, so long as you're not a criminal, but is just about the last person you want to piss off. I also like coming up with unique/creative uses of powers and abilities outside their obvious uses, so it was fun to implement and it's good to hear that it didn't seem too random for her to be able to do that.
I have a bit more planned for this story, 1-3 chapters depending on how I write them, but finding time to write them outside of when my Patrons vote for it is going to be hard. Hopefully I won't keep you waiting long.
[Report This]Date: September 02 2019 8:15 PM Title: Not a Trace
I'ma huge fan of your writing and collages, please continue to make more no matter what it is , I will love it!
Author's Response:
Thanks! More is on the way, work is just making it harder lol
[Report This]Date: July 14 2019 7:46 PM Title: It All Comes to This
Nice chapter, we’ll written. I know Marcus isn’t the greatest guy, but I really like him. I’m nervous for what Enma has in store for him!
Author's Response:
Thanks! Glad Marcus didn't come off as too bad of a guy. Good thing Tes took a liking to him, otherwise you wouldn't have to wonder lol
[Report This]Date: July 14 2019 9:31 AM Title: Not a Trace
How does this story not have any reviews? It’s great! I can honestly say that’s the first time I’ve seen someone get squished behind the knee. That was surprisingly hot! I wish I had thought of that!
Author's Response:
Happy to please! Yeah, I was thinking of fetishes that I could use and read a gang-bang doujin around that time with a typical plot. When I remembered one of the panels where the guys were using everything they could, (holes, hair, hands, feet, breasts, etc.), Ithought clued into them using her elbow and knees and figure 'why not?' lol