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Reviewer: giantess jessica Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 30 2017 11:40 AM Title: Chapter 1: Waiting

i made 2 stories so far!

Reviewer: giantess jessica Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 30 2017 11:39 AM Title: Chapter 1: Waiting

i do my real stories from my phone. I love the story. Im a giantess that loves to mess with poeple. Keep up the good work.

Reviewer: ap13rocks Signed [Report This]
Date: November 25 2017 10:59 PM Title: Chapter 1: Waiting

When writing a story, it is important that you avoid using slang such as "u" instead of "you" or "bc" instead of "because."  For the future, it's alright if you need to take your time to create a chapter.  A story (at least in my opinion,) is a lot more suiting when in moderate size as oppose to mutiple mini chapters, but that's just reference.  Anyway I saw a tag regarding vore so I'm am looking forward to any possible unaware vore.  Besides that, you honestly have a nice story basis, imput those suggestions if you'd like and I hope this helped.  Keep up the good work :)



Author's Response: Thanks ap I’ll definitely keep your suggestions in mind. I wrote the draft on my phone and sometimes my brain just goes on autopilot. And there will definitely be some unaware vore in the next couple chapters.

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