Date: August 17 2016 4:56 AM Title: Prologue: Daughter's Graduation
Really neat, I greatly enjoyed these three chapters. Love the vignette format and your concentration on these two specific characters amidst a larger story.
Just the right level of character detail, and I'm quickly attached to your protagonists.
Date: August 16 2016 11:35 PM Title: Prologue: Daughter's Graduation
hey really well done! i was wondering if you were planning to incorporate some unaware gts chapters when the protagonist is doll size or smaller? he might get stuck and unable to move or mistaken for another object. You have writing talent!
[Report This]Date: August 16 2016 2:48 PM Title: 2 feet, 6 inches (House Guest)
Amazing story so far! I will be checking regularly and eagerly for the next update!
[Report This]Date: August 16 2016 12:46 PM Title: 2 feet, 6 inches (House Guest)
Ice water; must have some. Now!
[Report This]Date: August 16 2016 12:35 PM Title: 4 feet, 2 inches (Twin Peaks)
I guess family men aren't the masters of subtlety they think they are.
[Report This]Date: August 16 2016 12:26 PM Title: Prologue: Daughter's Graduation
Loved the cliff-hanger. :-)
All that was missing was the classic sound effect: "GASP!"
Date: August 16 2016 9:45 AM Title: Prologue: Daughter's Graduation
Well this one will be a gem in the future. I think the biggest thing right off the bat I liked about your narrative is that you didn't make the main guy completely focused on the focal girl too fast.
Keeping it slow and having good development is great sometimes, and you are doing it well! Good luck for future updates