Date: September 11 2016 10:15 AM Title: The shrink
Mikeesan is trying to say it needs to be longer. As in 8780 words instead of 878, adding a zero the the end of the word count.
Date: June 13 2016 5:37 PM Title: The shrink
First off, good unaware topic story idea. But you need to make paragraphs. You have no paragraphs and just a wall of text. It makes it very hard to read, and kind of an eye sore. As Eternal36 suggested you should work on your punctuation as well! I hope you don't get discouraged and keep on writing the story! Just improve readability and you should be good! I hope to see where this story goes :)
Date: June 13 2016 4:02 PM Title: The shrink
Like Eternal said, the biggest thing to improve readability is paragraphs. Even just inserting a line break whenever a new person talks will improve it dramatically. Reformat it and keep going, GTS Maids are hot af.
Date: June 13 2016 3:16 PM Title: The shrink
i won't read that, i appreciate that you've tried to add to the community; but please use some punctuation. Use paragraphs, sentences with comma's, uuse something that allows this to have readability.
Date: June 13 2016 12:58 PM Title: The shrink
Great tags. Sadly there is a 0 missing at the end of the words count.
Author's Response:
0 missing words count? I am confuse since I am new at this q.q